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    This is my body

    This is my bodyBorn in the cold month of Januaryraised in south philadelphia and now MY BODY is just a place to help peopleAlways trying to be the best so I can show people the way to improve themselves when they look...

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    • I love the way you started the poem. It drew me in right off the bat. There was something about the power of the wording that you used that drew my eye to your writing. The poem tells me a lot about who you are as well as who you want to be. I am interested to know the places that you will go to in the future, and what you will do to be the change in the world.

    • This poem was brilliant in it’s way of relating the author to a positive change in the world. I love how you incorporated your surroundings and beliefs to describe the person you are and wish to be. I look forward to reading more posts by you in the future.

    • This was a beautiful poem. I loved how you talked about how your body is a way in which you can change the world to become better. I liked your idea of how bodies help us to help people and improve their lives. I also think we can do the same things to improve our lives.

    • I really like your poem. I like how you reference your body as a place to help people. You use your body to do good and use it to better humanity not make it worse. If you let it, your body can do amazing things.

    • Your poem was great! I love how you want to be the person to make the world a better place. The level of ambition you must have is extraordinary!

    • I think your poem was very good. I like how you talked about your body, features, etc. I think that helps other people realize their bodies are amazing just how they are.

    • I really like how you brought a lot of imagery to it, but i think a slight format change would really help. Even just splitting up the lines a bit more. But it is really good for what it is.

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