I like how this post was written from the perspective of a person with opportunities. You also considered many factors that contribute to inequality including racism and poverty. Maybe try including some effects of inequality and why it is present in the U.S.

I completely agree. I really like how you said that America is the land of false advertising to some. That is absolutely true. Many come here for the many opportunities that are constantly advertised by the country, but are left disappointed when they find that it is virtually impossible to build the life you want without having an in. Why do you think that is? Do you think that it has always been false advertising or was it once true?

This is a well writen comment. I love all of the examples you used in this post and how they are relevant. The points that you bring up are very true and they are also problems that we shiuld try and solve. The facts that back up your points are very accurate and support them well.

I really enjoyed reading your post because of how relevant it is and the obvious research you put into it. It is extremely well written. America promises freedom and opportunity. Yet, there is an overflow of inequality going on. People do not have the same opportunities as others when it comes to race, gender, religion, etc. Complete freedom does not exist when people are getting arrested/sometimes killed by police for not being white.

Hey,

I find you write really well from different perspectives, but you also write really well tying these new thoughts to older of more current events, such as the wring of the Declaration of Independence, and the storming of the capital in recent years. One thing you said that stands out for me was in response to the “not all men are create equal” quote, you say, “This part of the document was written by a slave owner which highlights the ways in which our country is built on unkempt promises.”, pointing out that the united states was really build on an idea, and has evolved to a more bias interpretation of the the idea of “not all men are create equal”. So, I found this really persuasive as a reader, and agree with this idea of deception of the United States. Really good job!

Hey,

I really like how you connected your personal feelings into this essay. Although I strongly disagree with your personal feelings, you did a great job of integrating them, but also pointing out how others have vastly different experiences.

One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is: “The country that I see as a land of freedom and opportunity has been a land of false advertising to others.” I think this is important because it sums up your opinion, but also shows an opposing opinion. However, you could make it better by connecting it to people like you saying that the US has given them opportunities is what gives people false hope in the first place. Possibly if people did not speak like this an falsely advertise, others would not be hurt as badly as they are.

Another sentence that I liked was: “Declaration of Independence it states, “all men are created equal.” This part of the document was written by a slave owner which highlights the ways in which our country is built on unkept promises.” I love how you were able to connect to how the US has been unequal since the very beginning, and use historical evidence.

Have you read “Denial is the Heartbeat of America?” I thought you might be interested in this because of it connects to your point about the declaration of independence. Many people refuse to even recognize that the “founding fathers” were racist, immoral people, and are able to idolize them. It connects to the article because it shows an example of people denying the parts of US history that they feel uncomfortable with.

Thank you for writing, I loved how you included many perspectives including your own and were able to get past the denial that is at the heart of this nation in order to recognize its flaws.