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“Mom I want to go to my room, Instead of sitting out here. Out here I can feel the gloom. In my space, I feel the calm and hear nothing but a pin drop.”
“Alright Juan, you go be...
I really liked reading this, although short. Not sure if you made it yourself or were inspired by something else but I really liked it. It brought a lot of emotion to it. It made me think back to when I feel sad sometimes, and I only want to be in my room laying down, doing nothing. I understand the meaning behind it as well; that people would rather stay in a safe place that brings them comfort, than being outside in the real world where it doesn’t feel so safe.
I am interested in your poem, “A happy place,” because you literally described every teenager’s life of how they feel more safe in their room than anywhere else. We feel safe there because we can be yourself without being judged.
One line that stands out for me is, “In my space, I feel the calm and hear nothing but a pin drop”. I think this line is powerful because it proves that it’s quiet and you feel like nothing can hurt you.
Another set of lines that stands out for me is, “I know your room helps you keep the faith,The faith that the world is a happy place.I think these lines are impactful because many teens stay in there rooms just to get away from our problems and life.
Thanks for your poem. I look forward to seeing what you make next.
“Mom I want to go to my room,
Instead of sitting out here.
Out here I can feel the gloom.
In my space, I feel the calm and hear nothing but a pin drop.”
“Alright Juan, you go be safe.
I will be out here where I have space.
I know your room helps you keep the faith,
The faith that the world is a happy place.”
the poet uses imagery or descriptive language. he creates a vivid picture of time in history.
this poet uses the "End-stopped" technique. "end-stopped" is a line that ends with a complete phrase or with punctuation.
the mood or the atmosphere of the story in this poem is both frightening and determined. the mom is feeling frightened and the child is determined.
This is very sad & heartbreaking to see or hear a parent having to through this.
this has to be the worse experience any parent has to go through.
The mother of the child is really protective, and in fear that her child could get harmed in any way.
it seems like Danel went through the ruffest stuff in jail. and the fact that Danel is able to tell Fonny his story, Fonny may have a memory of the story while he's in jail too.
Tish is getting some flashbacks about Fonny, but this time with one of Fonny's friends. and it seems like they're talking about the wedding that was *supposed* to come.
it seems that Tish can't handle Fonny being in jail. Tish seems to be thinking the worse if what would happen if Fonny was in jail longer.
and I think this is a better move than just marry someone without notice.
at least there wasn't any violence.
I would feel the same way.
I think it seems that everything has worked out well.
I think that was the main reason Tish & Fonny went to that place so that Fonny can admit to Tish's father that he wants to marry her
Fonny is feared that Tish might lose interest in him if she's away for a while,
geez..... all because of a newborn.....
they did found out about their son being in jail?
Fonny doesn't need to look all handsome just so he can get approved by Tish.
I think Tish is in a not so friendly neighborhood.
if they are gonna have a baby.... then drinking may not be a good idea.....
Joe is forcing them harshly to come over.
The sisters could be busy though.
I think Bonnie thinks about his mother because Tish knows how much Bonnie loves his mother, & knows how much Bonnie loves Tish
either I think that Tish is saying that because they both did "something" in between the days of Fonny's freedom & imprisonment, yet they weren't married.
they do that because they might feel guilty to even look at that person.
raising your fist is the meaning of having hope & power.
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