• Thanks for your input Meggy! That was my aim, to start with a sort of self-centered view, but end it with an insightful, true message. I look forward to seeing some of your work soon.

  • Thanks for taking the time to read my poem! I agree completely with what you said about friends having your back in those situations, and hope to read some of your work soon.

  • I want you to fall.Like so many others in this twisted worldI want you to put all your effort into somethingTo believe that it will workAnd completely fail.I want you to mess up.THEY want you to mess up.To

    • This was beautiful! I loved how cynical it started out, but was resolved into a beautiful message. It wasn’t overly sweet or sugarcoated and I love that! Great work!

      • Thanks for your input Meggy! That was my aim, to start with a sort of self-centered view, but end it with an insightful, true message. I look forward to seeing some of your work soon.

    • It was very good! You made a point with this poem, but you can make it more useful and sweet!, But great work!.

    • hi joey,
      i really loved your poem, “i want you to fall” because it reminds me of how people always want you to fall, even your closest friends are waiting on the day you mess up to not be their to help you back up, this is very deep, good job and keep it up,
      sincerely, Matthew.

      • Thanks for taking the time to read my poem! I agree completely with what you said about friends having your back in those situations, and hope to read some of your work soon.

  • Joey commented on the post, Why Me? 6 months, 2 weeks ago

    To Jennifer,
    Thanks for sharing your poetry on YV! I liked the way you tied together the story of Romeo and Juliet, with your personal experiences. I feel like most people can relate to your poem to some degree, and I think your writing really comes from the heart. However, I was slightly confused by your last two lines. What is to be or not…[Read more]

  • To Ivy,
    Thanks for sharing your piece! I really liked this poem, not only for the smart rhymes that you managed to incorporate into your poem, but because of the way it flowed. The section I like the most was the last five lines. One of the reasons I liked it was because it was one of the strongest rhymes, but I was also a little confused with…[Read more]

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