A Change for the Better
“Pues mi niñas los vamos!” All I heard from my father’s mouth.
My dad told me that we had to move because he had gotten a new job.
The only things going through my head at the moment7 Comments
I like your writing piece because your writing piece is like a mix of both poem and story. I like the line, “A few more hours later we had gotten to our new city and home… I just wanted to scream and cry.
But at the end I wanted for everything to be, Fine. Good. Better.” I like that line because it really shows how although you didn’t want to move away, you were still trying to hold up and think the best. I hope to see more of your writing pieces in the future.
I like your writing piece I think it is very sincere and something very relatable. I had to go through a change too but I am glad things got better for the both of us. Change can always be good for people.
Besides the story I like the structure of your writing. I think its very clear how you did verses and then words to describe something. I think this is a very creative writing style.
I hope to keep reading your writing!
I like the piece you have decided to share, change is always hard to go through with. I struggle with change too. I like how you intwine your own feelings along with those of your family. I hope you still have those connections with whomever you knew in LA, and that the memories you made being in Oakland have been just as great. This story was amazing, and I’m glad you are good at adapting to these changes.
Joanna commented on the post, Why I'm Athletic As Hell
This poem is very relatable as being an athletic myself this is a form of saying that no matter what just have fun. Your writing piece is interesting and engaging. I loved how you put another quote of an athletic player that helps and motivates you.
Why am I energized as Hell?
Sometimes i’m quiet.
But maybe not all the time.
You grow up.
Your brought down.
But your in charge.
Of those feelings deep3 Comments
I am amazed by the energy that you have. A lot of people aren’t really energetic and are really lazy. One sentence that you wrote that stands out for me is, ¨The new energy created, The one that makes me want to jump and dance.¨I think this is because you use that energy for your benefits and to help yourself. It is always good to help yourself first and use that energy to do good things like dancing. Another sentence that I liked was, ¨Of those feelings deep inside of you. I let the negative vibes pass by.¨ I like this because you let the negative things just go and it is good because you don’t want to have bad vibes. I agree with you that time goes by really fast and you have to enjoy every single second that you have.
Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next, because I like how energetic you are and how much more you are capable of writing.
Joanna commented on the post, The real meaning of my name
I am really proud that you wrote this piece for your name memoir. “The real meaning of my Name” is really good and engaging because if other people were to read it, it would show how engaged and how you like your name show them the important of other names too. One sentence yo wrote that stands out for me is,” My name represents who…Read More
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I can strongly agree with what it was like moving from a place you’ve lived at for a really long time. I felt the same way but once I figured we moved for the better, it all got easier to process.