you painted such a vivid picture i think many of us around the world can relate to. great work!.

Dear jackson:
I am impressed by your story “the end of the semester”, because you were able to paint a very vivid picture of your experience.
One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is: “Ms.Williams heels cracking on the floor” I think this is beautiful writing because it shows very good attention to detail.
Another sentence that I loved was: ‘Something I have found out about myself from this experience is I can do better.” This stood out for me because it shows a lesson you learned from this experience.
Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next because your writing style and attention to detail are very mature.

This story was very good I understand it but this part when you said “She was mad but at the end of the day I passed and she did understand me.” i was confused on how she was mad even though you passed but overall you made me take this story put it in my head and imagine it you did really good great story.

Dear Jackson,
I feel many people will be inspired by your story and I agree with your takeaway from the situation, that we can all do better. The fact that you were motivated to put in moire time and effort to making yourself a better student is very inspiring to those who are struggling. I am sure that you are doing much better in your academic career than you were when you wrote this story.

I like this story and I understand the sentiment because it is something I can identify with as a student. Mentioning that you were dreading the letter J because it was getting to your name was a great addition. I think you could improve this writing by being more descriptive of the setting and people.