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     Knock knock 

    When I heard the door, the bell rang as well.

    “Get the door please Sasha!!” said Ms. Charles, my last period teacher.

       Creep, creep, creep

     Ms.Williams heels cracking on the floor

    The End of the Semester

     Knock knock  When I heard the door, the bell rang as well. “Get the door please Sasha!!” said Ms. Charles, my last period teacher.    Creep, creep, creep  Ms.Williams heels cracking on the floor, she walked into the class with a bunch of papers....

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    • you painted such a vivid picture i think many of us around the world can relate to. great work!.

    • Dear jackson:
      I am impressed by your story “the end of the semester”, because you were able to paint a very vivid picture of your experience.
      One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is: “Ms.Williams heels cracking on the floor” I think this is beautiful writing because it shows very good attention to detail.
      Another sentence that I loved was: ‘Something I have found out about myself from this experience is I can do better.” This stood out for me because it shows a lesson you learned from this experience.
      Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next because your writing style and attention to detail are very mature.

    • This story was very good I understand it but this part when you said “She was mad but at the end of the day I passed and she did understand me.” i was confused on how she was mad even though you passed but overall you made me take this story put it in my head and imagine it you did really good great story.

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