• Th’ expense of spirit in a waste of shame Is lust in action; and till action, lust Is perjured, murd’rous, bloody, full of blame, Savage, extreme, rude, cruel, not to trust, Enjoyed no sooner but despisèd

  • This poem brings up multiple questions for me. One question that seems to keep infiltrating my mind is, how is one’s value judged. The poem doesn’t directly answer my question, but it hints at it instead. F

    • Dear Jillian:
      I am impressed by the connection you made between the poem , “ Sonnet 129,” because your poem instead of answering your question directly, did it discreetly. You made an inference for the answer to your question due to having the evidence first. It is impressive because you decided to come up with a question backwards.
      One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is: “From what I understand, a spirit is judged on how they are perceived in human form” I think this is a magnificent catch because you found out what the poem is saying and what is occurring in the poem. With you really understanding the poem, you also understood that someone was being judged for who they really aren’t.
      Another sentence that I really liked was: “I believe the poem is about how one’s life value is judged and whether or not we deserved to be remembered.” This stood out for me because after this line you added evidence from the poem. This sentence was also your beliefs and you stated it.
      Your questions or analysis for your poem reminds me of something that happened to me. I was also questioning my poem and I turned it into a life question.
      Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next.

    • Dear: Jillian
      I am satisfied with your poem, “Sonnet 129,” because your poem is really straightforward. One set of line from stanza 2 line 3-6 that stands out for me is, “Each meaning changes the poem in different ways. The idea that a spirits value is based of how shame it creates is very interesting. What creates shame is a very controversial topic. What brings shame to one’s self or family changes on the person’s ideology therefore this “value” system of a spirit is quite biased and controversial.” I was thinking the same thing and idea because when you first introduced in like in the first stanza it kinda implied that so i was thinking about then when confirmed it i was shocked. Your poem seems so familiar to me i just can’t figure out what it was probably a poem that I once .Thanks for your poem. I look forward to seeing what you make next. I enjoyed your thinking and your choice of words.

  • Jillian wrote a new post, #4795 4 months, 1 week ago

    Its four black sharp spikes will always protect Against the harsh abrupt life that comes quickPeople say its life is not correctBut this innocent life was sadly picked It’s motherly features do not scare me It j

  • Dear Chole,

    Your initial analysis was done very well. I can tell that you have thought deeply about the subject. I personally really like your word choice. Your word is strong and really adds a punch and it puts your work on a different level. The words you chose also helped get you get your point across.In addition, I love how your theme it was…[Read more]

  • When I first read this poem I found it very unusual, I was unable to grasp the meaning of the poem. This poem had me feeling perplexed but at the same time content. Honestly the whole poem was perplexing.

    • Dear Jillian :

      I am intrigued by your post “My first impression of Sonnet 129 by William Shakespeare,” because you added the history of the poem and the poet into your post. It really made you analysis even stronger than it already is.

      One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is: “When I first read this poem I found it very unusual, I was unable to grasp the meaning of the poem. This poem had me feeling perplexed but at the same time content.” I think this is very relatable because I felt the exact same way when I read my gateway poem.

      Another sentence that I was: “Sonnet 129 was written in the year 1593. During this time Shakespeare’s close friend, Christopher Marlowe passed away. Marlowe and Shakespeare wrote multiple different things together. Shakespeare has a tendency to write tragedies. ” This stood out for me because you can really tell that the poem you analyzed was about the death of his friend.

      Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next because you are an amazing writer.

    • Dear Jillian
      I am thrilled by your post, “My first impression of sonnet 129 by William Shakespeare,” because , I love how you gave background information on the poem, and what william shakespeare was going through at the time, so we(the readers) can get some insight in on the poem lines your talking about.
      One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is: “Sonnet 129 was written in the year 1593. During this time Shakespeare’s close friend, Christopher Marlowe passed away. ” I think it is cool that you included this bit of information because it makes the lines that you said more interesting because now I know the context.
      Another sentence that I liked was: “. Marlowe and Shakespeare wrote multiple different things together. Shakespeare has a tendency to write tragedies. With that information I can infer that this sonnet was written about the death of Christopher Marlowe.” This stood out for me because you made a point and proved it very well and concisely.
      Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next because your post was very welll thought out, informative, and interesting.
      -Kalina

  • Dear Wendy,
    “A poem of Mexico” is a very versatile poem. There are many literary devices that you use that really bring out the poem. Specifically your use of repetition makes the poem more powerful. When you repeat she waits, it just adds more emotion. The more emotion makes it easier for people to fully connect to the poem.
    This…[Read more]

  • Alongside my friends who talk but I talk not The fog covers my mindWe talked the night away At Prospect Park we unravel  I admit their convo was intriguing It was full of laughter and smilesBut they never

    • Dear : Jillian
      I am enchanted By your poem, “voices in prospect park,” because it is really admiring of how u described a good time.Even if your friends didn’t notice when you left, you looked at the positive.
      One line that stands out for me is, “Alongside my friends who talk but i talk not ” I think this line is mysterious because you decided to stay quiet although your friends were having a great conversation.
      Another line that stands out for me is, “Caught up with themselves they forgot about me” I think this line is showing more emotion towards the poem by saying that they had a great time but they didn’t even pay any attention to your absence.
      Your poem reminds me of a poem that I once hanged out with my friends and we had a great time and they also paid no attention to the fact that I had to leave
      Thanks for your poem. I look forward to seeing what you make next.

    • Dear Jillian,

      I am amazed by your poem, “voices in prospect park” because you gave explicit details on how you feel about the park and what emotions trigger you up. Also, you explained who you like to go to that park with and how much they make you smile.

      One line that stands out for me about your poem is ,’It was full of laughter and smiles.” I think this line was beautiful since that’s your friends are what made you feel the way you feel about that park. This is also important to me because it gives me an idea on what i should do when i’m depressed or sad and who i should go with.

      Another line that outraged me was,”The convo continued for a strenuous period of time”.this quote explains how many things you can share with your friends and how much y’all enjoy each other.

      Your poem reminds me of me and my friends when we go to the park and have lots of fun with each other. I love how you even spoke about them in this poem.

      Thanks for your poem. I look forward to seeing what you make next. I would also love to share your amazing this with others. I’ll advise you to keep up the good hard work.

    • Hi, Jillian!

      I notice that you replace “dirt” in the first draft with “heart” in the second draft: “In the heart of Prospect Park”. So interesting!. I like both options. For me, the image of “dirt” brought to mind ground that was unadorned with grass. That visualization made me wonder if dirt symbolized the feelings you had from being unheard and unseen in that conversation: being voiceless or being left out can make one feel unlovely or unimportant or like you don’t matter – like dirt. Then I saw another possible connotation: maybe the “convo” was gossip — like maybe the friends were sharing the “dirt” (intel) on people outside the friend group. Or maybe the topic of conversation was repulsive to you – dirty. Or maybe none of this! Maybe it was just wet out, and the grass was too wet to sit on, so you sat where it was drier. When you replaced “dirt” with “heart”, as in “the heart of Prospect Park”, it seemed like a stroke of genius irony: the friends were heartless.

      I enjoyed reading your poem!
      Your teacher, Kiran.

  • Dear Julissa,
    Your bio is really well written. You do an amazing job describing yourself. I definitely agree with you when you say you think you’re a great dancer. You have so many different interests and its so cool. You have really great goals. I really like that you make personal connections throughout your writing. The memory you gave…[Read more]

  • Dear George,
    I love your post “In my neighborhood”. Your photos overall are amazing. The angles and lighting really add the pictures. My favorite photo is the 3rd photos. It sets a different perspective than your other ones. I personally feel that your other photos are more close up. This photo however is more distance. It’s like your taking…[Read more]

  • Jillian Wood is an American-born Chinese young woman who finds politics, dance, economics, criminology, psychology, neuroscience and military tactics interesting.. At a young age she started dancing while at

    • Dear Jillian,
      I really liked the way you described yourself and the way you showed that you are very confident. I also like the way you chose to describe yourself in third person instead of just saying me myself and I. I admire that u seem to know everything about yourself and that you are very honest about ur characteristics. You seem very talented and thanks for writing , I look forward to see what you write next.

  • My backyard is lushes in the summertime. Exotic plants take over my section of our garden. My family loves to grow juicy red tomatoes, fresh pink raspberries, and herbs like basil, lavender, and mint. We also

  • The brown stone fence that creates a barrier between me and the park. Rusted benches placed strategically along the sidewalk. There’s a performing area for the summer concerts. There’s baseball fields and soccer

  • All these photos were taken by me.

    The brown stone fence that creates a barrier between me and the park. Rusted benches placed strategically along the sidewalk. There’s a performing

    • Dear Jillian :
      I am fascinated by your photograph, “A Path,” because of perspectives of each photograph

      One part of your photograph that stands out for me is where you took a picture of the stairs. I think this is interesting because you chose to take a picture from the bottom of the stairs rather from the top and it make it look very high up.

      Another part that I really like is that there is no one there it is empty. This stood out for me because where is there that there in no one at in NYC it always packed. This creates a spooky vibe and the fog too.

      Your photograph reminds me of a place I once went once. It was a park in Jersey, and it was in the morning it was empty and it was a very spooky vibe. I was think were is everyone it was almost scary as I was alone and I was always think something or someone is going to come out of nowhere.

      Thanks for sharing your photograph. I look forward to seeing what you make next, because this one was very intriguing

    • Dear Jillian,

      I am intrigued by your photograph, “A Path,” because I am always in Prospect Park. It is where I grown up and spent most of my life. So to see the park from this perspective is crazy to me because I’ve never seen the park like this.

      One part of your photograph that stands out for me is where you show how gloomy and misty it was. I think this stands out because it gives of an eerie vibe, which isn’t something you’d think of when you hear the word “park”.

      Another part that I like is where you took the picture of the steps. This stood out for me because I’ve been on those steps before so you made them look different to me since I’ve never seen them in the rain. Also, the angle you took the picture at, creates an optical illusion.

      Thanks for your photographs. I look forward to seeing what you make next, because clearly you’ve shown that you are an excellent photographer.

    • Dear Juilian:

      I like the way you took these photograph of “A Path,” because of the way the weather was like when you took those photos. It dark and gloomy which I like.

      One part of you photo stands out to me is where you took the picture of the leafy road. It’s interesting because it reminds me of where I live where it’s not packed and is cool.

      Another part of your photograph that stands out to me is those steeps a very unique perspective of taking the picture.

      Your photograph reminds me of where I live when it stops raining giving the same vibe your pictures gave to me.
      It’s a unique vibe that only some people like where it’s quite yet spooky at the same time.

      Good looks keep doing what you are doing. I look forward to what you do next.

    • Dear Jillian,

      I am astonished by your photographs, ‘Prospect Park in the Rain” because they made me more concerned about parks. I usually don’t go to parks, but you’ve made me interested in them just by taking excellent pictures on them.

      One of your photographs that stands out for me was when you took a close picture of the tree stems and how it showed many rain drops so beautifully. I think this picture stands out because it reminds me of spring, when it rains in the night and then the rain drops stay on the trees branches till morning. Your pictures look so real, you’d think you’re a professional photographer.

      Another photo that stands out is the one when you took a photo of the bench. In the background of that picture, you see lots of leaves on the ground, all soaked. Your pictures also showed how foggy parks would get and how they look just like the forests.

      Thank you for your outstanding photographs on the park “Prospect Park.” I am looking forward to you taking pictures of a different place and showing all the details needed. Your pictures gave me a clear idea of how parks look in the rain since it’s so rare for me to go outside in the rain.

    • Jada replied 5 months ago

      dear Jullian, You’ve made me interested about the photos you’ve have taken. I’m a lover of rain and nature. I love when thunderstorms come meaning the thunder, the lightning, the smell of the rain all of it. so when i look at your pics I see beauty and inspiration from the place you love to go which is the park.

    • Hello Jillian, I enjoyed your poem and I enjoy these photos. Although this park could look scary at night, it looks like the perfect place to go for a run! We have a few parks here in Austin that have trees surrounding them like this but I do not think they look as peaceful as Prospect Park. You take good photographs, I especially liked how you get the water drops hanging from the branches/bench. I hope to see more of your pictures of your favorite places in New York!

    • Dear Jillian:
      I am amazed by your post, “Prospect Park in the Rain,” because your pictures are really nicely taken and it looks like you really thought of which ones to use and how to take each one. I love how you made something so gloomy, like the rain, into something so pretty. One picture that stands out to me is the one with the close up tree branches. I think this is pretty because you can see the drops on the branches like if they want to fall and they’re just about to. Also I like how the background is blurred out. Another picture that I like was the one with bench. This stood out for me because I like how the color of the bench contrasts the background making it appear more vivid. Also the fact that the background is foggy makes it look almost mysterious and mystical.
      Your pictures remind me of like a forest or like a place outside of the city. This looks like a good place to go when you want an escape from the city. This reminds me of this one time when I went upstate and went for a trail walk. The way you took these photos gave me a similar feel and resemblance of what it looked like.
      Thanks for your post. I look forward to seeing what you post next because it seems like you have a lot to show and your pictures are really well taken, it looks like a professional took them.

    • Dear, Jillian:
      I feel involved with your photographs “Prospect Park in the Rain,” because i love the rain and I used to live around Prospect Park.
      One part of your photograph that stands out for me is the third picture shows a public bench but the details of the rain dripping from the bench makes the picture look good. I Really love that picture.
      Another part where I interesting is the first picture because it showed the outlines of the tree and tree branches. This stood out to me because it looked very unique and the sky blended in with the tree, it could tell a story.
      Your photograph reminds me of paintings or when scary movies show the outside when it rains.
      Thanks for your lovely photographs I really like how you captured the rain drops. I look forward to seeing what you make next, because your photographs tell a story.

  • Jillian commented on the post, Frenzy 5 months, 4 weeks ago

    Dear Mariam,
    Your poem “frenzy” is very relatable. I remember a moment in time when something like this happened. Your poem made me feel different emotions depending on the line that I was on. Your poem does a great job at evoking memories and different emotions.
    Your poem creates a an image that I can relate to. Line 10, “bodies packe…[Read more]

  • Jillian commented on the post, raining 5 months, 4 weeks ago

    Dear Ajaeya,
    Your poem “raining” is truly magnificent. I personally enjoy the rain and doing rainy day activities. The rain makes me feel calm and at peace. Your poem perfectly describes how I feel when it’s raining. In addition, your poem does a great job at creating a visual for me.
    Your descriptive words and literary devices creat…[Read more]

  • Jillian commented on the post, C is for Consent 6 months ago

    Dear Iween,
    Your poem is very strong. The adjectives you chose evoke a lot of different feelings. You interpreted a syllabic poem in a new and original way. This poem i feel brings awareness to such a difficult topic.

  • Jillian wrote a new post, hippocampus 6 months ago

    I remember my mom walking outside No matter the weather Coming back reeking of an unpleasant smell I remember my dad going to work Bringing me back sweets I would savour them Until he left for another trip I

  • Jillian wrote a new post, define 6 months ago

    How do you defineThat emotion that drives youClose to the edge of The boundary of sanity insanity Where do you fall in Love is what, to you? Marvelous, disastrous, what-who knows except for your concealed

    • I love how mysterious you made the poem sound.It makes me think deeply

    • Dear Jillian:

      I am excited by your poem, “Define,” because your poem is very cool.

      One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is: “ Marvelous, disastrous, what-
      who knows except for your concealed antics, your mind that reflects,your pure,sinister essence.” I think this is very cool because It is a paragraph where you express many feelings.
      Thanks for you writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next, because I liked this poem a lot. I would like to see more poems than you write.

      Samantha M.

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