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    The separation between communities

     Thesis statement: This article is yet another instance of how people from different social classes are kept apart from one another. White people felt that black people shouldn't and wouldn’t be able to afford the homes that middle class...

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    • The way that your essay is structured, separated into sections titled with their main topic, makes it very easy to understand what you’re talking about and what the overarching message is. I also appreciated that one of these sections is specifically focused on Philadelphia, bringing the topic of Atlanta’s traffic jams and infrastructure and segregation directly to us with personal examples of how you see it reflected in our city. Since you mentioned in the first paragraph that you hadn’t really thought about this topic before, do you feel like this activity has given you some valuable insight on the effect of racism on city infrastructure?

    • I like your image and it was the first thing that brought me to your blog. I agree with you when you said that you didn’t really think about how people are separated by where they live. I think it is not a topic people speak on often but it is a problem that white people don’t want black people in their neighborhoods and try to push them out. It is definitely a topic that could be talked about more.

    • What drew me to this post was its unique picture. Although I do feel that your use of “I statements” undermines the professionalism of the essay. However your essay is well organized and structured with headings making it easy to comprehend.

    • I like the image that you chose. I think the topic you speak on is often but it is a problem that white people don’t want black people in their neighborhoods. You see them try to push us out.

    • The title and image really caught my eye. With the title it gets the point of the text across, and gets enhanced by the image of someone being alone as if they are seperated. another part of the image I like is the fact that the world feels empty.

    • I think that the image you chose was interesting, especially considering the fact that it has actual buildings in the background that represent the skyline of city skyscrapers.On the topic of organization, I like how yours is set up, the subheadings to split each paragraph make it easier to read each topic thoroughly. In regards to your writing itself, you did a really good job with establishing the topic of how things like segregation, redlining, and urban planning can deter Black people from seeking the same opportunities as other groups of people can. In specific, education, jobs, sports, housing and so many more.

    • Jeremy, what drew me to your article was the headline and the picture. I believe that they are both good matches to each other seeing as there seems ti be an obvious divide between the black guy and the buildings surrounding it. I like how you decided to connect Atlantas traffic to other places such as Philadelphia. This is an amazing indicator that segregation due to traffic is definitely an all around the world problem which must be addressed sooner rather than later.

    • The image you choose gives me the idea of someone watching his city change right before his eye. Your thesis statement is very strong and interesting. Overall I like your interpretation.

    •   This essay highlights how people from different social classes are kept apart, showing how white people didn’t want black people living in their neighborhoods because of racism and class differences. Before reading this, I didn’t realize how much segregation affected where people live and their conditions. It’s eye-opening to see how highways were built through black neighborhoods, separating them from wealthier white areas and limiting opportunities for black people. This problem isn’t just in Atlanta; it could be happening in other cities like Philadelphia too, showing that segregation persists in different forms across the country.

    • I like how you started off with your thesis statement basically showing the ideas and thoughts you wanted to get out first. Your text feels really personal and can be connected to, with all of the examples being “I never” “I read” “I thought” and i don’t think I’ve seen another essay present its ideas like that. I like how each passage has a header/title telling you whats inside of the text

    • Hi Jeremy! Awesome essay. To start, I love how you organized and formatted your essay. I also like the perspective you took in your writing. Do you know of any other examples of this sociological phenomenon in our world today?

    • I like the image that you chose. I think the topic you speak on is often but it is a problem that white people don’t want black people in their neighborhoods. You see them try to push us out. I loved connection with are world today

    • I love the way your essay was broken down into different categories, especially in the second paragraph where you talked about how the black communities were so impacted by this.

    • I really like how your paper was broken down into distinct sections, particularly in the second paragraph when you discussed how this had a significant impact on the black community.

    • your comment reveals the eye-opening reality that highways were built through Black neighborhoods, effectively separating them from wealthier white areas and limiting opportunities for the Black residents. This is not just an issue confined to Atlanta, but is an ongoing problem in other cities like Philadelphia as well.

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