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    Jefferson P commented on the post, My Time

    Dear Albara,

    I am interested in, satisfied with your introduction because… of the way you say things and how you are actually trying to explain everything.

    One thing I learned from your writing that stood out for me is: “Maybe I’m going there, to the U.S.A” I think this is interesting, because how you went from there to here, and how you…Read More

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    little me to old me

    I’m sitting alone on the train, kids are screaming, very loud.someone dancing for some money, and to make everyone’s dayon the train not talking to anyone because I did not have any friends“Why don't I try to make new...

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    • Hey Jefferson!
      I really enjoyed this! I liked how much you said in just a few sentences. I could really visualize what you were talking about.
      I wish you luck with your baseball!
      -John

    • I really liked this writing. It really conveys what it feels like to look back on moments and think of what would have been good to do. It’s really cool to look back and see how our lives have improved as a result of the decisions we make. It’s always interesting to think of what we would tell our past selves.

    • Hello Jefferson,
      I thoroughly enjoyed your post because of how inspiring it is. Many people have a very hard time breaking out of their bubble and making friends with others. Adjusting to a new environment can be very hard and even more difficult when you are a shy person. I am very happy that you found a good group of friends and are motivated towards having a great team as well.

    • Looking back and thinking of moments where you felt isolated is interesting. Also, the imagery of sitting on a train was really good, it puts you very much in the moment. The part about leaving the bubble is also good imagery.

    • I liked how your poem developed from past to present. I found it interesting how you used the same scenario to describe two very different feelings. I also liked the concluding sentence, portraying that you will be on top some day. I liked how you developed your poem and think you should continue with this style of writing.

    • Hey Jefferson! I really enjoyed your post! Talking about breaking out of your bubble to create new interactions is really important. It’s really hard for some people to adjust to new environments and such but once, broken, it is such an accomplishment. I’m glad you were able to break out of your bubble and make new friends. Thanks for writing and I cant wait for your next post!

    • Hi Jefferson, I really connected to your post. When I was younger, it was really hard to connect to people because I was so nervous. But starting in fifth grade, I started making more and more friends. Now my friends and I are inseparable, and it’s really hard for me to imagine having to leave them for college. Thanks for letting us know about your experience and hope to hear more from you soon! Paul

    • Dear Jefferson P:

      I am surprised by your post, “little me to old me” because I like how you talked about the same scenario at different times. I think it’s amazing how we can change and get out of our comfort zones.

      One sentence you wrote that stands out to me is: ” “Why don’t I try to make new friends I should break out of this bubble. Talking to people and getting nervous because you need to interact so you can make friends “. I can totally relate to how you felt when you were younger. I think it’s sad how we can feel lonely and anxious around people that should make us feel comfortable.

      Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next because I like the way you express yourself. I would like for you to keep on telling us more about how you’ve become more sociable.

      Ana

    • Dear Jefferson P,

      I am surprised by your post, ” “little me to old me” because I loved how you explained how you need to get out of your bubble to have fun and just enjoy life. It’s very cool how you changed to get out of your bubble. Doing that allowed you to make friends and hang out with them.

      One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is: “Why don’t I try to make new friends
      I should break out of this bubble.” I thought this was something to take into consideration because you will literally miss chances to make new friends that could become very close. Making friends could make you feel comfortable and being happy.

      Thanks for your writing I look forward to seeing what you write next because I like the way you mentioned one of the stories from breaking up out of your bubble. I would like for you to keep telling us more about how you grew as a person from being more sociable.

      Ernesto M

    • Dear Jefferson P,

      I am really surprised by your post because I understand and could relate to you needing to pop your bubble in order to make new friends I understand that it may be difficult but you have to do what you have to do.

      One sentence you wrote that stands out to me is: ” “Why don’t I try to make new friends I should break out of this bubble. Talking to people and getting nervous because you need to interact so you can make friends”. It stands out to me because like I said I can relate to it.

      I appreciate your writing bro because it shows others that you can do things that you didn’t think you could.

    • Dear Jefferson,

      I am impressed by your post, “little me to old me”. Because it is amazing how you faced and overcame the difficult challenge of getting out of your bubble and social interacting with other kids your age. Many children face this challenge every day and think that they won’t have friends but once they speak and create relationships sooner or later the more and more friends they will have. You liked sports and wanted to play with others but were afraid of being judged and not liked. 

      I’m glad you were able to get out of your bubby and make friends that will last a lifetime so you can create amazing memories. Especially when playing a sport creates loads of fun and memorable moments. One sentence that stood out to me was “ Why don’t I try to make new friends I should break out of this bubble.” This stood out to me because I once was in your shoes and feared communicating with others as a child but as time went by and we grew up I created bonds with my peers and become friends. Sometimes getting out of our comfort zone creates a great difference in our lives. 

      Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next because I liked how you overcame a challenge and made a significant change in your life. I would like you to continue writing because I know many people/children can relate to your experience. 

      -Fatima 

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    Jefferson P commented on the post, Kyle

    Dear Isiah,
    I am excited about this journey poem, interested in knowing if you are happy with your new brother, your parents brought a new kid to this world, i want to know if you are truly happy with your new brother, satisfied with your poem because you put a lot of details and I can actually see myself. I can really see myself and picture…Read More

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    Sunset Park

    I'm heading to this park called Sunset Park, its a pretty interesting place, and I heard that there's a lot of people you can meet. Sunset Park is a huge park, I think this is the first park that...

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