I agree with you on everything you said! I also had to learn English when Spanish was my first language. I aso don’t like how some people get discriminated for who they are. Thank you for writing this. Im looking forward to what you write in the future.
I love your opinions on the current situation of America, but I also have some suggestions to improve your writing and argument structure. Just from a grammar standpoint, make sure to proofread your writing for typos. Many of your sentences do not have a space at all after the period.
Also, when you quote someone, only use quotation marks for direct quotes (if those are the exact words they used), and be sure to cite when/what it is from. Direct quotes look more professional, but if you do not use them, there is no need for quotation marks!
About your claim regarding “fixing the government within itself,” I would try to specify what exactly you want fixed. Are you proposing the people evict politicians from their elected spots? Are you proposing that future leaders propose bills to their local politicians, or something else entirely?
However, I love your insight and voice. Keep it up!
This is a youth-powered social network that was started in 2003 by a group of teachers from local sites of the National Writing Project.
We merged several earlier blogging projects. We have found that there are many advantages to bringing students together in one site that lives beyond any particular class. It's easier for individual students to read and write about their own passions, to connect with other students, comment on each other's work, and create multimedia posts for each other. Further, it's been exciting for us to pool our knowledge about curriculum, connected learning, and digital literacies.
If being part of such a community makes sense to you, we invite you to join us. We welcome all youth and any teacher interested in having students publish online and participate in the give and take of a social network like Youth Voices.