This article is very good! Your article does a really good job on evaluating and identifying the literary techniques that Orwell uses. I really like the quote you use because it really helps show the emotion and how big of a part of the novel that is. Your article is very effective in highlighting the essential themes of 1984 and showing the role they play in moving the plot of the novel along.

Hi Javier,
I too have read George Orwell’s 1984, and was constantly relaying the subtle similarities between our modern world and the world that is depicted in the novel. Like you, I found the conformity in 1984 to be vaguely similar to that of the world we are living in. I think that there is an overwhelming majority that feels acceptance is more valuable than self expression. In a way, we are all like Winston; full of fear that what is different is bad. There is a certain fear instilled in all of us that our unique beliefs/hobbies/etc are bound to trap us in the world of social denial.

Thank you Carter for taking your time and commenting on my post. Is their anything you believe I can improve for my next post?

Thank you Carter for your comment. Is their anything I can do to improve my posts?

Javier, I really like this topic and think it is great that you are researching this. It is important to point out the inequality that the poor experience in many states across the United States. They get trapped in this cycle that is very hard to get out of. I am really excited to see the progress you make in your research project this year.
I also found this article that you might like: https://www.thoughtco.com/poverty-and-inequality-in-the-united-states-1147548

Javier, I think this is a very interesting topic. A lot of people like to believe that in America, no matter where you start you can work your way up. Unfortunately, this is not possible for many poor Americans. Although it discusses the European Union instead of California, you might find this article helpful: http://www.eapn.eu/what-is-poverty/causes-of-poverty-and-inequality/. Good luck on your research project. I’m excited to see what else you might write on this topic in the future.

Javier, I really like your topic and how well you explained it. It really is hard for the poor especially in a world today. They don’t have enough resources to get them out of the conditions that they’re in which leads them to the negative route. Crime and injustice acts. Keep up the good work with your future topics and articles. Here’s a article that may like: https://vittana.org/26-poverty-and-crime-statistics

Javier, I really like this article because it connects poverty to crime rate, something that most people forget can cause increasing crime rates. “The results showed that seventy-two percent were in poverty and most of the young teens were dropouts and two-thirds were poor.This reveals how poverty and inadequate resources lead to crime”. I have family members that are in poverty and tend to commit rebellious acts and crimes. When in poverty, people do not have resources to education that betters their manners and humanity. Being around others who have committed crimes in that poor state can have influence too. If you create another article connecting to this one, I would like to know what your ideas are for helping to decrease crime rates in impoverished places? What ways can we help those in poverty to commit less crime and rebellious acts? Very good job on this article!

Javier, very informative post. Using authentic close to home examples provides strong support to your argument. Responding to the line, “…many lucky people who have a good life also realize that separation and division are prominent in their communities as well whether they’re rich or poor.” I think that this idea would be great to expand upon. To extend discussion on this topic you could add more economic detail to your writing, including things like what has led us into the economic inequality, and compare average income vs. crime rates of today and times in the past. Here’s a post that you could draw some useful information out of: https://blogs.worldbank.org/developmenttalk/does-lower-inequality-lead-less-crime

Looking forward to seeing you expand on these ideas.

Dear Javier, I really enjoyed reading your post and I think that you researching this and bring more light to it is very important. Even though I enjoyed reading your post, I did start thinking that not only poverty but also the environment the young people are raised in where some (or however many) adults are uneducated influence the young people in a negative way. SO with poverty and the lack of education, these both could be root problems and not just poverty. The uneducated adults negatively effacing the youths could be a very big issue too which enhances the effects of poverty.

Javier, I really like your insights on poverty and crime. I also have wondered if the two are correlated. I did not know that most people know someone who is poor, and I know someone who is poor as well. This really puts into perspective how poverty is more widespread that we think. Living in Utah, maybe I have a different perspective that would help your research. I found an article from the Salt Lake Tribune that explains the effect of segregation among the poor. http://archive.sltrib.com/article.php?id=2159471&itype=CMSID

Javier, I found your analysis of correlation between poverty and crime rate interesting. You talked a lot about poverty as a social issue. Here are some more things to consider. What is the rate of recidivism, and what are some more reasons that those in poverty are more prone to commit crimes. You should also research the demographics and common links between those incarcerated. I believe that act’s of support to the poor should not be viewed as act so pity. Rather, regardless of effectiveness, the objectives of most of these acts are to create a foundation for the future. It promotes those in poverty to improve not through handouts, but through acts of social justice. Give a man a fish, feed him for a day. Teach a man to fish, feed him for life. Or at least until pollution has contaminated all sources of fish in his region.
Here are some links you might find helpful:
http://www.apa.org/monitor/julaug03/rehab.aspx
http://www.huffingtonpost.com/christopher-zoukis/report-documents-us-recid_b_9542312.html
https://catalog.flatworldknowledge.com/bookhub/reader/3064?e=barkansoc_1.0-ch08_s03

Javier, your topic is intriguing and very serious issue in society all around the world today. It was refreshing that for a majority of your evidence on this topic you used real life examples personal to you. You also said that you wanted to make a change for those you know who are living in poverty. I am curious as to how you plan to change those below the poverty line in your community? I found a great link with ideas on how to help that might help you further your research and activeness in your community. http://time.com/money/4148121/charity-robin-hood-how-to-help-people-in-need/

Javier, I really enjoyed reading about your topic, I think it’s a very important issue that needs to be discussed more often. It’s easy to see that the inequality and division that surrounds us in the United States especially, effects those in poverty and low socioeconomic backgrounds on a serious level. It’s hard for these individuals to learn from their mistakes and get out this disastrous situation. If you’d like to read more about crime and youth poverty, as well as the lack of resources connecting to crime, check out this article: https://vittana.org/26-poverty-and-crime-statistics

Dear Javier, I really like that you chose to address a topic that effects your own community. This sentence stood out to me, “I chose this topic because I personally know a lot of people who are poor in Oakland to whom I am friends with”, I really liked that you mentioned this because It’s important, and especially impactful to talk about the things we care about. I also really liked all your sources you used to give examples, they were all very clear and informative. one suggestion I have is that as you continue to do more research on solutions we can all participate in to help the issue of poverty, that you include some suggestions for your readers on what they can do as well as the big picture solutions. I’m excited to see how you expand on your ideas!

Javier, I really enjoyed your comment about the correlation of poverty and crime. I think it is a huge issue in our world today. I also liked how you made it personal as well. Some further things to think upon could be going deeper into economical status and looking how you get out of poverty, and looking at different races in overly stricken areas incarcerated.
I found a link that may help.
https://www.scientificamerican.com/article/economic-inequality-it-s-far-worse-than-you-think/
Keep writing I can’t way to see this story develop.

Javier, this is a really pressing topic, especially when you discuss what Americans believe the cause of poverty is. You may want to look at http://www.heritage.org/poverty-and-inequality/report/the-economy-hits-home-poverty to help your reader understand what the government is/can do to alleviate poverty. I would like to read your take on what private charities and government welfare services are doing to help your friends, and whether they should do something different to help reduce the correlation between poverty and crime. The website I linked to above shows something rather paradoxical about the state fund programs that, as you say, “try their best to reduce poverty” – many of those state-funded programs actually need people to stay in poverty to avoid their funding being cut. It seems like a huge conspiracy!

I appreciated how bluntly you put your topic: “I feel sad for them and I want to make a change in Oakland by pointing out the unfair differences that poor people face in their everyday lives”. You have something that could be really powerful in your senior project! I’m looking forward to what you write next.
Eric

Javier, this topic is one of the most pressing issues in our society today. It is so difficult for most people to get out of poverty, and most of the time it’s something they were born into. People have no escape, so they often turn to the one thing that gives them a way out: crime. However, this often leads to incarceration, which makes their situation even worse. Although poverty can affect crime, I think that there is often a bigger picture. You should check out https://newrepublic.com/article/80316/relationship-poverty-crime-rates-economic-conditions, which offers some differing causes for crime. I hope you make progress on this project, and I’m excited to see the conclusions you’ll come to. I’ll be back for more!

Javier, I really enjoyed reading your post. You made it clear that poverty is a problem in the world, and that poor people feel this problem separates them from other people. I liked that you had useful examples when you said “most poor people are discriminated in the workforce and in society for their economic status, plus the act of giving to the poor is a nice act of kindness but it helps remind people of the divisions within a society.” I’m not familiar with a this issue on poverty as well as the background at what causes poverty but I found this video to be very helpful from CNNMoney

The video talks about how in order to fix poverty the local economy must provide jobs, and reasonable costs for food and shelter to people who are living off these wages from the local community.

I wish the best of luck, and please watch the video.

Javier, I think this is a great topic to research. Your evidence for your claim is very good, however I think it would be beneficial to focus a little more on the ties to crime and poverty in California. You did a nice job of explaining poverty and how it effects people. This article, http://articles.latimes.com/2011/sep/13/business/la-fi-poverty-california-20110914, might help you further you research. Nice job!

Javier, I really enjoyed reading your post and I believe this is a very important and intriguing topic. I have done some research in finding the link between poverty and crime rates. This has been shown in certain cities such as Baltimore and Detroit. This can be seen in the following article: https://www.economist.com/news/science-and-technology/21613303-disturbing-study-link-between-incomes-and-criminal-behaviour-have-and . This article shows how the linkage can be seen but I personally believe there are many other factors that play into the rate of crime. Thank you for sharing this and I wish you the best of luck with your project.

Javier, your research project deals with one of the most important issues in the US and around the globe that we face today.

We know about the poverty in third world countries and the people who die every day to hunger around the world, but sometimes we forget about the poverty in our own local communities. I am also concerned about the poverty in our country and more specifically in my community of Salt Lake City. Utah is home to one of the highest number of homeless people in the country, and I would like to know why and what I can do to help. I think providing information to organizations that help fight poverty would be a very strong addition to your paper. After doing a little bit of research I have found that California has the highest poverty rating out of all the states in the US. I think you could elaborate on this issue in your research paper.

I think if you add some details and statistics to your paper it will have me and others coming back for more!

Possible Resources:
https://www.forbes.com/sites/chuckdevore/2016/09/28/why-does-california-have-the-nations-highest-poverty-rate/#35c4b0b612d9

Poverty in California

Javier,
I really like this topic that you chose and I think it is awesome that you took the time to write about it. I like how you personalized it and had friends that deal with poverty and how you feel. Maybe expand how how these families are coping with poverty and ways they can work their way up. Keep up the good work! Here’s an article that you might like: http://www.povertyusa.org/the-state-of-poverty/poverty-facts/

Javier,

I was very moved by your post. It seems that you did a lot of research on that, which shows your passion for the topic and influences the reader of your argument even more. The thing that was most daunting to me was when you said,”The Association of Chief Officers of Probation studied 1,389 young people on probation schemes.The results showed that seventy-two percent were in poverty and most of the young teens were dropouts and two-thirds were poor,” a statistic that exemplifies the link between poverty and crime that you are speaking of. Here is a link that supports the connection between poverty and crime and expounds on your argument: https://www.economist.com/news/science-and-technology/21613303-disturbing-study-link-between-incomes-and-criminal-behaviour-have-and This data would definitely have something to do with crime rates in more highly populated cities being higher, because income inequality seems to be even worse in those places. Do you think that these statistics span across the nation? Across the world? I would be very inclined to find out what a broad range this observation may have. I hope to get the opportunity to read more work for your senior project; this is an incredibly interesting topic.

Thank you,
Sophia

Javier, I think you did a great job on your research topic so far. As a Californian growing up in the Bay Area, I understand where you are coming from. Where I’m from, the homeless population was incredibly high, and the population below the poverty live even higher. I find it interesting that so many young people on probation are impoverished, although not surprising. For more information, this link website might be helpful: http://www.povertyusa.org/the-state-of-poverty/poverty-facts/
Can’t wait to see your final results!

This is a real strong topic and most people understand this but don’t speak up for it, i agree with everything your saying. Society is not be equal to the poor which most are blacks, but its our fault the lifestyle we have to live. 100 all around

Javier,

This is a strong start to your project, and I agree that it is an important issue to address. I agree that there is a poverty cycle in disenfranchised communities, and it is unfair that government policies are not doing enough to support these communities. I think it would be important for you to propose solutions to this issue. An article from World Visions defines the poverty cycle, its effects, and potential ways to break the cycle. These ideas could be used as a platform to base proposals for the Oakland community.

https://www.worldvision.ca/stories/child-sponsorship/what-is-the-cycle-of-poverty

I look forward to your next post!

Isabell

Dear Javier,
I agree with you on everything you said! I also had to learn English when Spanish was my first language. I aso don’t like how some people get discriminated for who they are. Thank you for writing this. Im looking forward to what you write in the future.

Hi Javier!

I love your opinions on the current situation of America, but I also have some suggestions to improve your writing and argument structure. Just from a grammar standpoint, make sure to proofread your writing for typos. Many of your sentences do not have a space at all after the period.

Also, when you quote someone, only use quotation marks for direct quotes (if those are the exact words they used), and be sure to cite when/what it is from. Direct quotes look more professional, but if you do not use them, there is no need for quotation marks!

About your claim regarding “fixing the government within itself,” I would try to specify what exactly you want fixed. Are you proposing the people evict politicians from their elected spots? Are you proposing that future leaders propose bills to their local politicians, or something else entirely?

However, I love your insight and voice. Keep it up!

A Michigan junior,
Adelle

Thank you for your feedback.I appreciate it.

Dear Javier,

I am drawn to your post because of what you said about ideologies. If you think about it ideologies are the cause of division because people chose to only see one point of view and are completely shut off to different opinions.

One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is, “Throughout my researching process on Charlottesville I learned that ideologies cause division among people.” This sentence stood out because at first i didn’t really understand what ideologies meant, but as i was reading your examples i got a better understanding of what it means. Currently i live in Austin TX, this reminded me of a time when me and my family were driving on the highway and there was this truck in front of us who had two confederate flags in the back. It’s surprising that people are still hanging on to this old ideology. It’s surprising that people take pride in this southern ideology because it’s old and irrelevant. When people see this flag they feel threatened.

Another sentence that resonates with me is, “As a teenager we witness racial discrimination as well as racism in our everyday lives.” This stood out for me because us Hispanics/Mexicans often get called names. For example, people just say the worst things like wetbacks, drug dealers, rapists. People, as in Donald Trump, when he made the same horrific comments. I like how you stated that, “schools should teach students and penalize them for saying racist comments or jokes,” because this should stop. It is scary when the POTUS says divisive and false things, because it makes people think it is okay.

Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next because i enjoyed reading your post and i could also really relate to it.