• In 1984 by George Orwell there is this main figure that everyone looks at like a god, Big Brother. In our society today, although people may not enjoy it, our main figure is Donald Trump. To begin, the

  • Hey Valeria,
    Thanks for saying that I have good ideas. I will take into consideration to add more details to my next posts. Also thank you for your help, if it wasn’t for you I would have never finished it. I am not strong for I cried while writing the last part.

  • Hey Jules,
    Thank you for your comment. I wasn’t sure if writing the topics in two different paragraphs was going to work out or not. I will take into consideration for my next post to be smoother. Just a random thought: where are you from? Does where you’re from affect how you view my post? Looking forward to your reply. I’ll be posting more soon.

  • Jailinn commented on the post, Drugs. 2 years, 8 months ago

    Dear Valeria: “No one was there to teach me about it” it really stood out to me cause I am like that, no one was there to teach me right from wrong. Also “My school actually taught me about drugs and how addicting they can be” my school is hella stupid cause we didn’t learn about drugs being bad n stuff.

  • Drugs & Gangs

    In the Oakland Community

     

    What are some activities that affect your community? Is it drugs? Gangs? Or maybe even both? You may think that this blog will be all about gangs or drugs being

    • Jailinn, You have really good ideas! You just need to add more detail to them, I really like how you have explained what you had experience I understand it might be tough to have gone through something that horrible, yet you are extremely strong for sharing that part of your life story.

      • Hey Valeria,
        Thanks for saying that I have good ideas. I will take into consideration to add more details to my next posts. Also thank you for your help, if it wasn’t for you I would have never finished it. I am not strong for I cried while writing the last part.

    • Hey Jailinn,
      I thought it was a good choice doing interviews and including their responses. It makes your writing more distinct than just finding information online. Nice job talking about the topics separately and then connecting the two topics. First you mentioned how widespread knowledge and use of drugs was, and introduced Mitchell. then you connected drug to gangs with your interviews and brought back in Mitchell and his drug empire. The flow of the post could be smoother, but great job transferring your thought to the paper.

      • Hey Jules,
        Thank you for your comment. I wasn’t sure if writing the topics in two different paragraphs was going to work out or not. I will take into consideration for my next post to be smoother. Just a random thought: where are you from? Does where you’re from affect how you view my post? Looking forward to your reply. I’ll be posting more soon.

        • Hey again Jailinn,
          I am from a small, rural town in San Luis Obispo county, so I didn’t really experience heavy drug use or gang activity. It was interesting to hear what you had to say from living in a city.

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