Back then the crime rate in Oakland was sky high because of Gang Shootings, Fights and Robberies. But today there is more protection in Oakland because there are more police cars and there is also more c
Thank you so much for writing this but reading through your paragraph it started to get confusing. A place I started to get confuse was when you started to introduce a quote but your quote ended up being about asking a question to your mom. Some advice for you would be to either write about an interview in one paragraph and then write about article in another. But so far you writing is good and you have a good topic.
thankyou so much for sharing your poetry, a line that stood out to me was ´´You have to put it into your own perspective.¨ i connect to your poem because I know sometimes you have to go through things alone. I thought you have a lot of courage posting a poem like this and i think this is really good. thankyou so much for writing this poem and I look forward to reading your other posts.
I am amazed by your poem. “Why do people hate?” because it talks about things that are real and I feel a lot of people can relate to.As well some of the metaphors you use like the snake one.One part of your poem that stands out for me is where you talk about other people and like what they say.I think this is interesting because it’s true in some people’s lives and some not.Another reason why is because its talking about something that is real and I feel I can relate to it in a way.Another part I liked is where well just the whole poem in general because although its controversial your giving your own opinion.As well, you give your perspective and that is very important in a poem.
Thanks for your poem I look forward to seeing what you do next because your poems are good and you talk about real things like i’ve said and in a way me personally I can relate.As well it’s just good over all.
Dear Jai’kari, your shadowbox interests me. One sentence you wrote that stands out for me was when you wrote that you’re not really athletic but that doesn’t make you less of a man. It stands out to me because it’s true that you don’t have to be athletic to be a man. I agree with it a lot.
I am super fascinated on your work because you showed what you love doing and showed what you mostly do in your life which is awesome. I think that it is cool that you show 3 things that you love doing. One thing I am confused about is what are some things that you identify as like ethnicity.
This is a youth-powered social network that was started in 2003 by a group of teachers from local sites of the National Writing Project.
We merged several earlier blogging projects. We have found that there are many advantages to bringing students together in one site that lives beyond any particular class. It's easier for individual students to read and write about their own passions, to connect with other students, comment on each other's work, and create multimedia posts for each other. Further, it's been exciting for us to pool our knowledge about curriculum, connected learning, and digital literacies.
If being part of such a community makes sense to you, we invite you to join us. We welcome all youth and any teacher interested in having students publish online and participate in the give and take of a social network like Youth Voices.