Hey Katie, thank you for giving me the good feedback because it helped me dig in deeper about my topic because those are some questions I didn’t think about since I had a lot in mind. Also, yes it was wonderful interviewing real people who have been affected by the rent changes and I encourage you to read this article ( h…[Read more]
Your blog is good and I agree with what you said that people are getting evicted from what they once called “home”. I like the evidence you used to support your claim because it was very convincing. Also, I agree that rent is not affordable because I think that to. Maybe you should of used an image to show the data you wro…[Read more]
Your blog is really good and I really like your topic. I also believe that is an serious issue that needs to be solved because also a lot of families stay here if the father gets deported. This is very sad bc is not fair for me and I agree with you that it has affected a lot of families and everyone should be welcome in…[Read more]
I like your blog because it has some good information and agree with you that violence in Oakland needs to stop. I agree with you that gun violence is also one big problem in Oakland and that it needs to stop. One thing you could of done better is maybe add more sources so you have more evidence to support your…[Read more]
I like how you show that landlords are increasing rents and which is terrible for low wage families and show that they are having a horrible impact to families and showing the reasoning behind why people leave Oakland to look for a better home. Something that stood out from your work is when you show that you interview families and asked them about their thoughts on Oakland rent. Something that can help you with your work is using the website http://www.grammarly.com this is a very helpful website
I am excited by your blog “Landlords Increase Rent Prices” because you go into detail and explain what is going on.As well, because you talk about the community and it is a lot of different perspectives that adds to your post.
One sentence you wrote that stood out to me for me is : “Rent change in prices has been affecting Oakland communities a lot because many people can’t afford to pay rent. Many people either get second jobs or end up leaving their homes because they feel pressured because the landlord keeps increasing the rent prices.” I think this is really good because it’s exactly what is going on and that way others reading this can see what they are going through.
Another sentence that I liked was “ Landlords should understand that what they’re doing isn’t acceptable because not everyone has wealth like them and they need to acknowledge that everyone has other bills to pay and is not all about rent.” This stood out to me because this is really good and you give your own perspective.As well ,because it is something that is true and they should be able to understand that.
Thanks for your writing.I look forward to seeing what you write next because I think your work is very good. Also, very interesting and I feel I can relate to it in a way.
I like your poem and how it talks about love. The quote that i really like is, “We can’t buy true love” because that is so true and i believe in that to. If a person buys love then it is basically selling their happiness. Good job on your quote.
A question I have for you is why did you write this quote? (2) What inspired you?…[Read more]
This poem connects to the novel of Romeo and Juliet because they couldn’t live a happy life together because their parents hated each other. My poem is about my cousins that hate each other because they don’t
This poem is great it shows the bad and the good for people where you that love is the answer not hate, I like how this poem show that gun violence is all around. One question I have for you.
What is normal? What makes someone or something normal?
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Am very proud of you because you’re representing your culture and where you came from. I love how you started with your artist statement saying, ¨I have chosen to represent my culture and myself because I think it’s important that other people know that I appreciate my culture and I’m grateful for everything I have In thi…[Read more]
I really liked how you explained what your shadow box is and what it represents. I agree with you when you said that people believe the black color is a depressing because it's actually not. I believe it's a beautiful color and something that just goes with everything. Am glad i read your artist statement because it…[Read more]
This Shadow Box represents my counter narrative, dominant narrative, and my chosen identity. When people look at me, they see a girl that always does her work, is smart and shy. But, this isn’t true because that’s
The shadow box itself is so beautiful and unique. I appreciate how you included stereotypes in your box, such as the expectation for girls to be traditionally pretty, but also symbols and objects that are true to who you are. The metaphor of the butterfly coming out of its chrysalis was something I really related to while reading this. Your description and love of your culture is incredible, thank you for sharing that. The theme of colors and joy permeated your whole description.
I love the symbolism in this project. The addition of the butterflies to represent your true self opening up is beautiful. It is also refreshing to read about how much you love your culture. Finally, the stereotypes on the outside of the box are very correct and applicable to women everywhere. It makes you story relatable. Thank you for sharing your personality and traits with us. I hope the quote “difficult roads often lead to beautiful destinations” is true for you and all women who have faced unfair stereotypes.
Ingrid, what a beautiful box! Your metaphor of the butterfly was a very creative way of representing your hidden personality. Your pride in Guatemala was also touching. It is important to be proud of where you came from because it will always be part of who you are. I too spent a significant time of my life growing up outside of the country, and it has shaped who I am today. Ending your post with a quote was a very effective conclusion. Thank you for sharing such personal information.
You shadow box is really nice and it clearly demonstrates who you are as a person because of the items you chose to include. I really like that you chose to represent yourself as a butterfly the way you said they have to open up and let their true self be shown that really gave me an idea of who you are as a person. Something that stood out to me from your box was that you added a lot of color because is something I did different with my shadow box. Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next, because your writing is interesting and besides that you show your true self and you are a proud writer which inspires me with my own projects.
Wendy Perez Govea
Your artist statement is so clear. Your shadow box is so colorful. You explained in detail what you included in your box. I like the quote you chose. I also like what you said about the quote that one day everything will pay off. Overall your artist statement goes well with your box! I really liked it!
Your shadow box is beautiful and I love the meaning behind it. I relate to how you mentioned you may appear shy when first meeting someone knew and then open up once they get to know you. Overall, you did an amazing job both with the box itself and the description portion.
My name is Ingrid Ramirez, I really like your shadow box because you have specifically the things that represent you and your family who seem very important for you. I have so many connections with you because people think that of me to. Am very glad to hear you speak 3 languages and am guessing one of them is mam. I feel so proud of…[Read more]
My name is Ingrid, i really like your shadow box and your shadow box gave me ideas of what to do in my shadow box. I really like the bird you put on there and i relate so much to you because i also like to be free and do my own things. I know your a very strong woman because you have been thru many things and your still…[Read more]
This is a youth-powered social network that was started in 2003 by a group of teachers from local sites of the National Writing Project.
We merged several earlier blogging projects. We have found that there are many advantages to bringing students together in one site that lives beyond any particular class. It's easier for individual students to read and write about their own passions, to connect with other students, comment on each other's work, and create multimedia posts for each other. Further, it's been exciting for us to pool our knowledge about curriculum, connected learning, and digital literacies.
If being part of such a community makes sense to you, we invite you to join us. We welcome all youth and any teacher interested in having students publish online and participate in the give and take of a social network like Youth Voices.