Hey Mr. Ogaz thank you for taking the time out of your own personal life to comment on my post. Sorry I wasn’t very explicit I tried talking about the celebrations that I went to but I think it all got messed up. The 2 main focuses I wanted to point out were the 5 de Mayo celebrations and The Day Of The Dead celebrations. Yes I have gone to the l…[Read more]
Thank you for taking your time out of your day to comment on my post. Choosing this topic to talk about was a great decision because now I see how many people relate to the Oakland cultural celebrations. I’m so happy you made a new friend while being at the celebration and it’s amazing to see how you’re both still in contact. I also made a new f…[Read more]
Thank you for taking your time out to comment on my post I really appreciate it. I really enjoyed writing about this topic because when the season of celebrations come around you see many commercials on TV about how fun they are and they really are. Many people have kept this tradition going on for so many years. Oakland is also a diverse…[Read more]
Your blog was amazing! You really brought out your own opinions on this topic. I agree with the OUSD raising awareness because some of our parents don’t know about this and if they advertised families taht school lunch is a problem it could have kids having a school day w/o being hungry. Thank you for writing this! Good job.
Your topic is a relevant topic right now. Teachers aren’t getting payed the minimum, money is overused in unnecessary supplies. Money should be spent the correct way because everyone deserves opportunities and if we don’t have opportunities is it really helping us? Your analysis is really good and it really gave us another side to wha…[Read more]
You covered an important topic in your blog and this clearly shows your understanding of the immigration topic. One of my favorite lines was when you said in your analysis “ICE clearly used their dominant, institutional power, to oppress a family of color”. You’re using words that really make…[Read more]
I am proud of your work about “Cultural Celebrations in Oakland”, because you explain how these celebrations help out the community be together as one. One sentence you wrote that stands out to me is , “Oakland Celebrations are so special because everyone is welcomed and they can learn about each other”. I agree with you when you pointed out that Oakland Cultural Festival help out bring community together as one. Thanks, for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next, because talking about the topic of Oakland is really important for our community. We need to stand out for each other and create a supportive community
Thank you for taking your time out to comment on my post I really appreciate it. I really enjoyed writing about this topic because when the season of celebrations come around you see many commercials on TV about how fun they are and they really are. Many people have kept this tradition going on for so many years. Oakland is also a diverse city/community that brings in many cultures and it’s so beautiful. Once again thank you for writing a generous comment under my post!
I really admire how you choose a topic that interested you. While reading your paragraph I agree with many things you had to say about how Oakland has empathy for all races. I really like when you say “ When the entire community comes as one it’s so beautiful because people come in as strangers but leave with many new friends. Many families are smiling, eating, dancing, and playing” I agree with this because while I was at a parade I made new friends with the people around me because we were bonding with each other and we were at a festival we both really enjoyed being at and I still talk to her till this day. Many things can come out of a cultural festival. I also admire how you speaked in very clear detail about this topic and your article was very interesting to read.
Thank you for taking your time out of your day to comment on my post. Choosing this topic to talk about was a great decision because now I see how many people relate to the Oakland cultural celebrations. I’m so happy you made a new friend while being at the celebration and it’s amazing to see how you’re both still in contact. I also made a new friend but the thing was that we lost contact and that isn’t a good thing since now I can’t talk to her. Making friends can honestly be hard but when you find a person with the same interests as you and you bond you can call it a friendship. Once again thank you for leaving a comment under my post!
Hey Mr. Ogaz thank you for taking the time out of your own personal life to comment on my post. Sorry I wasn’t very explicit I tried talking about the celebrations that I went to but I think it all got messed up. The 2 main focuses I wanted to point out were the 5 de Mayo celebrations and The Day Of The Dead celebrations. Yes I have gone to the latest celebrations! The recent celebration that happened in Oakland was the Day Of The Dead that happened around November and I decided to go. These celebrations are so beautiful like I mentioned in my blog you see many people come together as one. I did saw a good amount of cultures out. For example the food is all different. You go on one corner you have Mexican food. The other corner has Salvadorian food. Then you see Guatemalan food, etc. Not only the food but the music and the rhythm. While walking around you see the altars and those are honestly my favorite. They’re my favorite because people go out and decorate the altars with the objects their loved one enjoyed. These celebration really unite many others. Have you ever gone to any celebrations like these? If so I would love to hear back from your experience!
Your poem is beautiful. I really likes your last line “But the ultimate tragedy was their agony”. That last line was powerful and it rhymed. Looks like you put two topics in and made it all one. I also liked how you used exact lines from the book/film of R&J. Your use of metaphors is really strong and good. Overall your poem is…[Read more]
Amazing poem you have! Community is a big topic because in those communities we have a thing called home. I liked how you used “A plague Plague of both houses?Nah a plague on the people who created this“Street Disturbance” this part is outstanding. Usually we think about problems breaking out because of two households but it’s…[Read more]
My poem is about love and how it doesn’t always end as a happy ending. I feel like some people go through these type of heartbroken days. I just wanted to take my time and write about this because I went through
Thank you so much for sharing your poetry. A line that stood out to me was “I looked at you and I thought you were mine
I looked at your pupil the size of a dime
Tryna make you mine but there was no time ”
,because of the use of rhyming combined with your feelings.
A connection I made to your poem is the feeling of finding out about someone not actually caring for you.
Your poem also reminded me of happiness that can happen when someone does love you and care for you.
Thank you so much for writing and I look forward to reading your next post.
I really love your poem. I think many people can relate to your poem. I think your claim about how love doesn’t always end up being happy is really good and understandable. I really the part when you say,”Falling in love is like a Ferris wheel it’s going all good until it stops in the middle you don’t know what’s wrong but you gotta be strong”. This line stood out to me because of the simile you used and because you say you gotta stay strong. Overall your poem was so amazing, I hope you write more in the future because you are a really good writer.
I love your poem because it has times and sounds of typing and that is a great detail you have added and the way your poem was written was amazing i really enjoyed reading your poem. Your poem feels real and i like the way you ended the poem. You are a great writer and hope to see more of your amazing poems.
Dear Imelda, I just love the fact that you wrote the poem about the one person although he hurt you alot and it speaks a lot to me. I like how you added a lot of details like sounds the time and how you will feel about talking to him. The line that i really like of your poem was “Falling in love is like a Ferris wheel it’s going all good until it stops” because i could imagine in my head what’s happening. I hope you find someones that loves you like you could love someone because you deserve it, you a great person.
I think your poem is amazing and very detailed. One part I like is that you put ¨typing¨ to make it seem like someone was actually typing. I like that your poem is relatable. ¨Falling in love is like a Ferris wheel it’s going all good until it stops in the middle you don’t know what’s wrong but you gotta stay strong¨, is one of my favorite lines from your poem because it totally relates to the struggles of love. You should keep writing and keep expressing your feelings because I think you will do great.
Your shadow box is amazing! I saw the effort you put in it when we worked on our shadow boxes. I like how you explained the dominant narratives. The last sentence was so powerful just like Ms.Portugal says “ Words Have Power “. The baby pictures you included are so cute! Just like you ;). Overall your shadow box is ama…[Read more]
Your artist statement is so clear. Your shadow box is so colorful. You explained in detail what you included in your box. I like the quote you chose. I also like what you said about the quote that one day everything will pay off. Overall your artist statement goes well with your box! I really liked it!…[Read more]
I really like your shadow box and your artist statement. Your artist statement has a lot of good details and see that you like photography I also like photography and want to study it when I got to college. I enjoyed reading your artist statement and seeing your shadow box.
Am very proud of you because you’re representing your culture and where you came from. I love how you started with your artist statement saying, ¨I have chosen to represent my culture and myself because I think it’s important that other people know that I appreciate my culture and I’m grateful for everything I have In this world¨. I love how you are appreciating all the things you have in life unlike some people that don't appreciate what they have. I agree with you that your culture is unique and its everything to u because you know i'm from todo santos too. And I believe that to, am also glad it gave me the opportunity to wear other type of clothes and speak in another different unique language.
I am proud of your shadow box because it is very creative and beautiful, One sentence that you wrote that stood out to me was “I have chosen to represent my culture and myself because I think it’s important that other people know that I appreciate my culture and I’m grateful for everything I have In this world. To me, my culture is everything. I think It’s very unique in its own ways” I really like this sentence because it shows how you like to represent your culture and how it is very important to you and I can also relate with you because I also love my culture too. Something that was very interesting from your shadow box was how you have 2 levels in your shadow box its very nice, organized and detailed.
I am inspired by your shadow box because you were not afraid of sharing what your shadow box meant to you. Your shadow box is so beautiful it’s so colorful and I love what you included in it. It looks like you really took your time on embellishing it. You added great pictures and you talked about the things that you enjoy doing. I r…[Read more]
This is a youth-powered social network that was started in 2003 by a group of teachers from local sites of the National Writing Project.
We merged several earlier blogging projects. We have found that there are many advantages to bringing students together in one site that lives beyond any particular class. It's easier for individual students to read and write about their own passions, to connect with other students, comment on each other's work, and create multimedia posts for each other. Further, it's been exciting for us to pool our knowledge about curriculum, connected learning, and digital literacies.
If being part of such a community makes sense to you, we invite you to join us. We welcome all youth and any teacher interested in having students publish online and participate in the give and take of a social network like Youth Voices.