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    What Would Baldwin Say? Black Lives Matter Protesters vs. Trump Supporters

    The people on the left are standing with their hands above their heads. The people on the right are being violent and pushing. The people on the left aren’t holding anything while the people on the right and holding...

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  • Dear Karim:
    I am happy with your reading of Nick Flynn’s poem, “Cartoon Physics,part 1 ,” because the poem talks about the innocence of the child, where they can use their imagination to be whatever they want, but the real adult world isn’t the same.

    One line that stands out for me is, “that if a man runs off the edge of a cliff / he will not f…Read More

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    "The World in the Evening" by Rachel Sherwood, Read by Ian

    As this suburban summer wanders toward darkcats watch from their driveways — they are boredand await miracles. The houses show, through windowsflashes of knife and fork, the blue lightof televisions, inconsequential fightsbetween wife and husband in the guest bathroom voices...

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    • this poem was so good

    • Dear Ian:
      I am intrigued with your reading of Rachel Sherwood’s poem, “The World in the Evening,” because when you read it I was able to get a deeper understanding of what this poem could mean. One set of lines that stands out for me is,

      “miniature guerillas
      that mimic the ancient news of the world
      and shout threats, piped high across mock fences
      to girls riding by in the last pieces of light”.

      I think these lines are powerful because it shows what summer can potentially be in this town. Another set of lines that stands out for me is,

      “voices sound like echoes in these streets
      the chattering of awful boys as they plot
      behind the juniper and ivy,”.

      I think these lines are powerful because it shows the negative actions people can have this summer.

      Your reading helps me to understand a poem that I once heard. It is also about how summer is approaching but the only difference is in this poem, it was about the positives of summer in this town.

      Thanks for your reading. I look forward to seeing what you make next.

    • Dear Ian:
      I am calmed by your reading of Rachel Sherwood’s poem, “the World in the Evening,” because the words give a very calm vibe. Also the title is very calm.

      One line that stands out for me is, “voices sound like echoes in these streets.” I think this line is calm echoing is a very psychadelic sound.

      Another line that stands out for me is, the color of the sky makes brilliant reflection”. I think this line is deep because it is a metaphor for reflecting on life at the end of the day.

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    I Remember

    I remember when I used to weep over the smallest thingsI remember when I didn’t eat the crust of the pizza.I remember when I used to sleep late because I liked to read Percy Jackson books at night.I remember...

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    Ian commented on the post, Where I'm From

    Dear Ocean:
    I am amazed with your poem, “Where I’m From” because you’re talking about all these unique things that makes you, you.
    One line that stands out for me is, “From those memories I know I am the product of intellect and diverse cultures ”. I think this line is great because you’re talking about your family.
    Thanks for your poem. I…Read More

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Incongruity: when something is out of place in its situation, seeming inappropriate. We don't know what the author meant when she said this line but it made the text more disturbing than funny.

Tone: The text's attitude toward an event or situation. I think that the author is using a sorrowful tone.

Mood: The atmosphere of a story. I noticed that the author makes a sad mood throughout the poem.

Question: Is the author repeating the same line to show that nothing has changed?

Question: What was her heart crying for?

I think that the girl's eyes are thirsty for the man.

I also want to know what the words her heart were calling

I agree. I think that the meaning of the first two lines would have changed throughout the poem.

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She seems a lot more confident right now than she did before.

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I also have the same question. Who are they talking about?

I agree. I agree that they keep bringing up that Fonny is being mistreated.

I agree. I am excited to see the reason Fonny is in jail. He's slowing revealing it so the tension can build up.

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I agree. I think that it was very nice of Fonny to bring her up the stairs instead of just leaving at the front.

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