I really enjoyed this point of view with the first amendment and students’ say within school ground. You have some really good points within your essay and I really enjoyed reading it. For the paragraph specifically talking about the first amendment, you could use a link talking about court cases dealing with free speech within a…[Read more]
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I think this is a very important thing to discuss. I often think people avoid talking about these sorts of things because it can hit a personal area or can be too deep for someone to understand fully. I like how you talked about teens and how the modern era is affecting depression and making it worse. Thank you for opening up to…[Read more]
Graduating hasn’t really been such a scary thing to me. As I approached my senior year, I knew I was ready immediately. In face, as I write this, if I could graduate right now, I could. We are some of the lucky ones to be ready. I’m very proud of you for figuring yourself out and knowing what you want to do in your future. I know you…[Read more]
I absolutely love this. I agree that creativity is one of the most amazing things in the world. Without it, we wouldn’t have some of the most wonderful ideas that were created for our day to day use. Without creativity, our dreams wouldn’t be able to become a reality because we wouldn’t have dreams. When we read books, we would just stare…[Read more]
Plastic Water Bottles Causing Flood of Harm to Our Environment.
I remember the first time I saw a bottle of water for sale, thinking it was the most ridiculous thing I’d ever encountered. 1Who the heck wo
This was very interesting to read. I love how you went in depth about your life and how it affects you. I love your dreams of being a cop and helping someone. I think it’s a wonderful idea. You are very brave and I love your writing. You should always be proud of who you are.
I love all of these connections. The stories are very interesting and left me intrigued. Everything happens in it’s own time and sometimes things don’t work out. You need to pace yourself out in life and know when to do certain things, and I think you described it all very well.
I love what you talked about in this. I definetly agree with our American ideals shifting from freedom to money and more physical things. You used very accurate sources to back yourself up and you knew exactly what you were talking about. We need to start showing our pride and independence. I love how strong this is.
I really love this project! You did very well on this. Stereotypes are pushed on us in the worst ways. As a woman, I understand the ones with the “perfect body” and a “slim waist”. I’ve always struggled with my self image due to the way society portrays us. You were very brave to share that information with us. I love seeing that you are…[Read more]
I’m really proud of you for sharing something so venerable with the world. Anxiety is hard to speak up about and I think you did so really well. I love how you described how you felt as “feeling a nervous ball at the pit of your stomach”. It’s really easy to imagine for some people who might not experience the same thing you do. Overall, this was…[Read more]
Earlier this year, around March, I became really focused on saving the environment. It had never really occurred to me how much plastic really destroys the planet until I started to do research on it. At first, I
I think you have a really good valid point that plastic bottles are an issue around the world; not only is it harmful to animals and the environment. But we also have to think about how the production of these bottles are also harmful to the environment. The only solution is either to use reusable bottles, or find a new alternative to plastic. But San Francisco is thinking right. The first step is to ban the bottles as a whole and recycle all the bottles in a way where it doesn’t damage an ecosystem.
I agree with your point. I never really thought about plastic bottle use that much until I read this. Now I realize how much it really is affecting our environment and the world in general. I know that this will be on my mind now and I will probably research some more about it because of this post. We have to take a stand now and save our world while we still can.
I agree with you that plastic bottles should be banned. I think you should add a little more about how it is harmful to our environment and how we should ban plastic water bottles. Also replacements we can use instead of plastic. What replacements of plastic water bottle do you think would be save our environment?
I agree with you on the fact that we need to take better care of our Earth. Reducing/eliminating the use of plastic water bottles and straws is a great idea and hopefully the idea spreads to other cities beyond San Francisco. The only thing I think about being are the people who are going to oppose this change, how can we get them to see that this would be a step in the right direction for the environment?
Plastic bottles have been a debatable issue, and I agree that people, by using plastic bottles, aren’t helping save the environment. I see why you are against it, but do you think that it’s something in America that can change over time or something will remain an issue? San Francisco is a great example of change, but changes for plastic bottles is going on all across America. Have you heard of Starbucks new plan in 2020? Starbucks is one of the leading cafes in America and is pretty close to plastic water bottle issue. However according to news.starbucks.com, “’Starbucks goal to eliminate plastic straws by 2020 from their stores globally represents the company’s forward thinking in tackling the material waste challenge in totality.”’ Yes, it might not be much to change our environment, but it’s taking baby steps to reduce this issue. It’s something to think about. But ultimately, your article is a great way to talk about an issue you care about!
Your argument comes mostly from a compassionate state of mind, its good to help animals and not to pollute. However, bottled water is a much more valuable commodity then you are making it out to be. In poorer countries like Africa or Asia bottled water plays a pivotal role in helping people gain the water they need to survive. Plastic also is a somewhat strong material, which is bad when trying to biodegrade but good when moving across distances. I think that the littering of plastic bottles, of course, is bad and needs to stop, however, there are other ways of going about that. For example, here in Michigan, we have a very low litter rate for soda cans because we back each can with a 10 cent return. It would be better to do this and recycle the bottles returned rather than ban them outright. This could also provide help for those suffering from poverty, which would give them a reason to pick them up as well.
It’s crazy to think that water bottles can cause so much harm to the environment. I never thought about how just one person could help the environment. I liked your point, but maybe you could provide a little more information on the options if we ban plastic bottles?
I understand your argument about how large amount of plastics not being recycled ca hurt the earth and animals/wildlife. over all it is a unrealistic goal to get rid of the use of bottles all together
I appreciate your writing of this article, this is a very important issue that not many people recognize or act on to improve. I will say though, that I did find some things that I think you could use to improve your argument. One of the main things is to do a facts check, in your post you said that only 38 out of 50 billion water bottles are recycled, but then referred to that relation as 23%, which mathematically doesn’t add up. Making sure you have accurate facts adds a very important layer to have in your argument, without which many people won’t take it seriously. Another thing that you could do to make your post stronger is using more formal words, trying replacing words like “a lot, and really” with more formal synonyms. One last thing that I think you could do is to expand your argument more, mention a counterargument, and add more length to your argument the intro should not be double the length of the argument.
I’m interested in what you think of these suggestions,
I completely agree with your argument and I believe this issue has become much larger in recent years. As of right now, it might be a little difficult to issue a nationwide or world wide ban on bottled water, but there are definitely some steps we can take before that. Touching on what you mentioned, the importance of recycling could be raise and stressed much more than how it currently is. New standards could be put in place regarding recycling bins and reducing plastic waste. Do you think it is the easy disposability of water bottles and other plastics that makes it easy to forget about the environment? How long do you think it will take before this issue finally catches up to us? Overall you did a really nice job, and I liked the sources you used to back your argument.
I think you have a strong point, but I think that it would be hard to ban plastic bottles many people use bottles as a way for their intake of water. Bottles are a very efficient way for people to access water when they are not at home and on the go. Places like marathons and running events need water and the best way is bottled water, you can try to use biodegradable bottles but they do just that they don’t last long enough. Plastic bottles are stronger and cost less to make. We can not ban bottles but we can change how people dispose of them.
I think plastic water bottles, and plastic in general, is very harmful to the environment. While plastic water bottles might be hard to ban, it could be easier to try and move other forms of packaged food and products from plastic packaging to things like cardboard and paper.
Your comment, “Instead of just using tap water, which would be roughly $0.49 a year for eight glasses of water a day, we are spending $1,400 a year.” is impacting because for a society that thrives off of capitalism and the economy, why aren’t we doing every little thing to reduce everyday costs? I think an answer could be found in our search for convenience. We would rather do things that help us short-term rather than long-term. The information you bring on San Francisco is interesting and will lead me to read more on the subject.
Great post, Penelope! I completely agree with you that we should all try to do better for our environment. Especially considering the use of plastic, there are so many alternatives we could turn to that are much less harmful. Based on your post, I think you would really enjoy this article (https://wellnessmama.com/58889/plastic-water-bottle-alternatives/) that I’ve recently read. I look forward to reading your next posts!
I believe you are bringing up an important issue regarding an environment. I recently learned about an organization called the Plastic Bank. They work in underdeveloped countries to collect plastic for recycling and provide jobs to communities.https://www.plasticbank.com/go-plastic-neutral/#.XHQMOfZFzZs I think this may be useful for your research.
This is a youth-powered social network that was started in 2003 by a group of teachers from local sites of the National Writing Project.
We merged several earlier blogging projects. We have found that there are many advantages to bringing students together in one site that lives beyond any particular class. It's easier for individual students to read and write about their own passions, to connect with other students, comment on each other's work, and create multimedia posts for each other. Further, it's been exciting for us to pool our knowledge about curriculum, connected learning, and digital literacies.
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