• Zachary commented on the post, Keep Going 1 year, 2 months ago

    Hi Asa,
    What I really liked about your poem was how you used a bunch of examples of how life can be rough and not easy at times. I also liked how you followed each of those examples with, “Keep going”. They’re two simple little words but they carry a big meaning to them. Overall, great job on this poem!

  • Zachary commented on the post, Fries 1 year, 2 months ago

    Hi Kalina,
    I really like your poem and how you described the fries. I like how you used the fries as if they had feelings, for example by saying that they ‘hide’ and are ‘waiting’. This adds an extra touch of excitement to your peom. I also liked how you described the tongues as being hungry. Really great job!

  • Hi Bryan,
    I absolutely love this post! The way you described Guy and the chef and the burger was amazing. The use of detail throughout the poem is excellent! Great job!

  • I don’t want to be here But here I am I have no idea who these people are Yet they still talk to me Despite the fact that the music is loud and I can’t hear them They are still talking to me When will I be abl

    • Dear Zachary,
      I like your poem “Why am I here?” because I like the way you express your feelings. One set of lines that stands out for me is, “I don’t want to be here
      But here I am” and I could relate to that, I had the same feeling as you when I moved from my country to the USA. Thanks for your poem. I look forward to seeing what you make next, keep writing poems like this one!

    • Hi Zachary,

      I really enjoyed your poem “Why am I here?”. I can relate to the feelings you conveyed in the poem. When you said “I just want to sleep… These people have too much energy,” it reminds me of the days when I couldn’t even get out of bed, and it took so much energy for me to just be at school. Like Jovana said, I also had the same feelings when I moved to Michigan from New York. Thank you for the great poem.

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