Gregorio, Kassandra and Khalid –

I’d like to start off by saying how much of a wonderful job you have done with presenting this upstander proposal. The topic that you’re addressing is definitely one that needs all the attention that it can get. I’m very glad to know that there are individual’s like yourselves that are voicing out their opinions about helping the Oakland youth in regard to drug abuse. Something that really shocked me is that you all mentioned that there is only one youth program that is supposed to address drug abuse, but in reality it doesn’t, which is upsetting. Which is why I mentioned earlier that I’m glad to know that you guy’s are voicing out your thoughts and opinions, especially to the city mayor. I am all for your guy’s plan of making an instagram account along with obtaining a charity that address’s the issue. Instagram accounts definitely bring awareness to the public, especially with hashtags that capture the reader’s attention. I have followed your instagram account and I am looking forward to seeing the progress of your guys’s plan.

Dear Raven N Reed,

Thank you for reading our work and leaving feedback we are very appreciative. When you said why we started with audience, I agree that starting with audience was a bit off-putting and it was an assignment, that’s how we were suppose to organize our work. Also, we used the two reviews of teens because those were the only reviews that showed up for the place so it’s all we had to work on.

Thank you for reviewing our work, we are grateful.

Also, we wouldn’t mind at all if you showed are work to your students. If you would like to check our the work of our other classmates please do. You can find it when searching for “upstander project” at the search bar and look for the ones posted in 2019 for my classmates work. There are also work from previous years with the same topic of being an upstander.

Sincerely,
Gregorio

Dear Greg,

I like how use evidence clearly to show how the Salvation Army help people with homelessness, drug/alcohol, and more! While you should have more analysis, you still did great in your essay by showing evidence, reasons, and having a great argument to argue. Also, you should explain more about why the Salvation Army is 100% Epic.

Edwin M,

Hello comrade, I appreciate your use of links in the actual essay so the data is easily accesible and how you have very diverse sets of data so that many parts of the salvation armies’ benefits. (Sal was here).

hi Huitzilopochtli, thank you for replying to my work and telling me what you liked, it means a lot. Also i don’t know if goodwill is similar to the salvation army because i didn’t do any research towards goodwill so i can’t really answer that. thank you for taking the time to read my work and replying to it. (please reply its for extra credit ;). )

I thought your poem was very deep and very good. Also I like how you connect R+J to the real world. I really like how you said a line of shakespeare and added it to your poem. Thanks for sharing your poem and sharing your experience.

thanks for reading my poem and giving me feedback about my poem and what was good about it. thanks

“The sounds of glass shattering across the floor
The bullets cutting the air
Going through the walls”
These words paint a very descriptive picture immersing me into the poem. It makes me feel like I am there experiencing this with you. Thank you for being so strong and sharing this personal story.