I really like what you’ve wrote in your blog “ Gentrification is Hurting Us’ about the Gentrification in Oakland and the impact is having. One sentence that stood out to me was “ I wouldn’t have known that this was going on in my community if I didn’t learn about it in class” from Jasper Wilson. This stood out because a lot…[Read more]
I enjoyed reading your Blog called “Bias, Racism, and Death in U.S. Communities” because your showing about the everyday racism. I agreed with your about discrimination on colour people since slavery. One part that stood out to me was your quote “ “A Latina woman sits with her boyfriend outside his parents’ house in San Jose, Californi…[Read more]
“My fellow Americans, we are and always will be a nation of immigrants. We were strangers once, too.”~ Barack Obama. As Obama stated everyone has migrated or at least had someone in their family that did. Imm
You did an unbelievable job at writing this. I love how you introduced the interviewee because you added good important information, this helps me add more information over my interviewees next time. I think you could’ve added more analysis about the quotes you chose. But I do believe your quotes were great and brought the reader’s attention. Another thing you did great was your conclusion it really told the reader the message of your article. Overall, I love your article and the way you formatted it but I think you could’ve added more analysis which would make it a lot stronger. Great Job! Sincerely, martha.
I like how you started the blog with a Barack Obama quote since he was the most impactful president in my opinion. Something you should do is when you are citing in your context to not write .com since it’s misleading. Also, check your spelling since it was confusing to know what words you meant to say. I hope to see more work about immigration.
First of all I love how you talked about a strong and really important topic in our city, State, and overall country. Something else I really like is how you format your article (by topics). When you use Obama’s quote, “My fellow Americans, we are and always will be a nation of immigrants. We were strangers once, too.” This quote was really relatable to me because we are all from different places world but we all live in a big country together. Something else that was really strong to me was when you talk about how people are leaving their country to have a better life and or to save their family. And when thinking about people leaving their country cause there in danger why would we deny them shelter especially if we have nothing against them they are just trying to save their family. Overall I love the topic you chose and I hope it raises awareness to others around us. I also suggest you to use grammarly because you had a few typos.
I am very proud of you! Thank you for sharing your powerful poem. One sentence you wrote that stands out to me is was when your wrote “Your face like an angel that can’t leave me
An angel like a guardian of my heart . I think this is very appealing because I like how you compared their faces with an angle. Another sentence tha…[Read more]
Thank you for sharing your powerful poem. One sentence you wrote that stands out to me is ¨ We do not count one forced marriage¨. I think this is very powerful because people think we have to get married when we don´t. Another sentence that I liked was ¨ You will soon find your power¨. This stood out because you´re showing the power…[Read more]
I liked how you used words in Spanish to express fear. With that fear it shapes your whole poem. I also like how you make nice how you used questions in your poem to make it clear people that people are confused. This also shows me that there are multiple personalities in fear. Overall your poem is moving and i hope you keep writing.
Christina : )
I love your shadow box! It looks so creative and original. A part of your paragraph that I like is where you talk about being really close to family and friends, and how you care about them. Something that stood out to me is where you talk about liking camping and being away technology ( I don’t think I can do that). Another o…[Read more]
One part of your paragraph, “The truth about me” that I like is where you take about soccer being really important to you! I like how you point out why you like cars and that your dad is the reason you are inspired on cars. A part that stood out to me is when you were talking about being Mexican, I agree that people see that bei…[Read more]
I am happy about your shadow box and paragraph, “This is me” because you show your hard work on both of theses and really stand out! I really like how you put baby pictures and some family members. One part of your paragraph that stands out to me is where you talk about how hard you work to have an education. I think this is exc…[Read more]
This shadow box represents my counter narratives which are my point of view of my own world, also my dominant narrative which is the point of view of society. When the people look at me, they see that I am
Thank you for sharing Evelin. I completely agree with the idea that there are many false stereotypes that are running rampant in today’s political climate. I wonder what you have planned for your future, and how you plan to achieve your goals?
your box was very well detailed with pictures of yourself when you were younger and pictures with your family. I also loved how you used the mexican flag to show your pride of your country it is really moving because of all the drama that is going on you still care about your home even though you are here. I also liked how you put quotes in about being short because that is something that’s not holding you back but is making you stronger. Keep believing in yourself
I am feeling really connected with your writing, “Jennifer shadow box” because even if I’m not Salvadorian, I get affected too just by being Hispanic. Now that I see that I’m not the only one makes me feel connected towards others. One part of your writing that stands out for me is where you talked about being born here but peo…[Read more]
This is a youth-powered social network that was started in 2003 by a group of teachers from local sites of the National Writing Project.
We merged several earlier blogging projects. We have found that there are many advantages to bringing students together in one site that lives beyond any particular class. It's easier for individual students to read and write about their own passions, to connect with other students, comment on each other's work, and create multimedia posts for each other. Further, it's been exciting for us to pool our knowledge about curriculum, connected learning, and digital literacies.
If being part of such a community makes sense to you, we invite you to join us. We welcome all youth and any teacher interested in having students publish online and participate in the give and take of a social network like Youth Voices.