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    I remember sleepless nights.
    I remember trying to run from the waves of emotions even though I knew I couldn’t escape.
    I remember my mother struggling to put food on the table and telling us that she is fine when

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    I remember sleepless nights. I remember trying to run from the waves of emotions even though I knew I couldn't escape. I remember my mother struggling to put food on the table and telling us that she is fine when we...

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    • Elliot, This is such a beautiful poem, I love poems and this one was amazing. For me personally I can relate to a lot of things in this poem, that is what makes it so beautiful and emotional to me. Keep up the good work. 🙂

    • This is a very powerful piece, very emotional and personal. I felt like I could strongly connect to you and what you have been through in your life. You seem like a very strong individual, and I commend you for that.

    • Elliot your poem’s style and use of literary tools make it impact full and relatable. With imagery, such as the wave, make the poem vivid and have a powerful voice.

    • This is a really emotional post which shows, if this is true, that you had a tough childhood. It was a good touch with the imagery of the wave, keep up the good work.

    • A great poem. You transmitted very good your emotions.

    • This is a great work of art and I think you could take it even further. Already this has the promise of an emotion filled poem

    • Dear Elliot,
      I love this poem, I am surprised at how relatable this poem is to me. This poem connects to many readers in the world as can be seen in your comments section. A line from your literature that really stood out to me was when you said, “I remember feeling guilty about these selfish thoughts.”. This line demonstrates how although our minds can appear to be self centered and corrupt when fending for ourselves we are simply trying to push forward. By “we” I mean teenagers as well as children and even adults in some cases. Now a days family can become hard to depend, which causes people to go out of their way to try and keep it together or keep themselves together and your poem perfectly portrays this. Your poem helps to show the world how hard it is to keep pushing forward when everything feels like its coming down on you and theres no one to help.

    • Very nice and insightful poem, The tone was melancholy yet well written, well done. 10/10

    • I loved this poem. The images were saw raw, I could visualize the home in which your poem is situated in. The images of a mother and male figures in your poem reminds me of my family’s situation when I was younger, and how we struggled as a new refugee family here in America. The repetition of the ” I remember” phrase in your poem because it keeps the reader focused on the fact that the whole poem is a flashback or memory. The last five lines of your poem:

      I remember teaching myself the things that my father never taught me.
      I remember wishing I could leave and never return.
      I remember wishing I was a bird and could fly away.
      I remember feeling guilty about these selfish thoughts.
      I remember growing up feeling lonely.

      drove the meaning of the poem home for me. The image of the speaker’s father leaving , never coming back, and never teaching teaching anything leaves a cold lonely image in the mind of the readers. This forces the readers, and me in specific, to accept the last line of the poem. The speaker was put in a situation in which he could only feel lonely.

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