Marvin, Iam glad to hear that you agree with being bilingual is an advantage when it comes to absorbing information. I believe that it is a great important skill to being bilingual, but we must be conscious of others when it comes to word choice. Over time diffrent words have evolved over time at a diffrent rate all over the world; so one may take…[Read more]
November 22, 2017 is the day where 5 star recruit Brian Bowen was told that he can’t ever play for the Louisville Cardinals again, or should I say “begin to play”. This whole money scandal first came to light on
Nice write up Ethan. This is an issue that seems to come up yearly ass college athletes are punished for not abiding to the NCAA’s strict set of rules. It seems crazy that for all the work they put in it can all be taken away so quickly. Whether or not college athletes should be able to be paid is a tricky subject, but it doesn’t seem right to take away all that they’ve worked towards for one violation. It’ll be interesting to see how college sports move forward in the years to come, and what changes will come.
Thomas, great sources and quotes! They related greatly to what you are trying to persuade . Your example of the the muslims and terrorists turned out to be a great supporting backbone of your statement. But I must say that I disagree with your statement that we shouldn’t let these “fears” change us, instead we should take advantage of these…[Read more]
Bobby. I disagree with your thought on how you think the stats are ineffective with change. People get scared of what out countries exterior outlook may look like in a few years. I enjoyed your post, it had great structure but I must ask, do you think people are born with obesity? and is it a mental illness in your opinion? I know a couple of…[Read more]
The topic of governmental control can be related back to the Republican and Democrat ideology. The U.S. government rein has gone through a rocky path, we have seen countless times where citizens are dragged into
Ethan, great idea of a post. I have to say gaining a citizenship in the U.S. is difficult process because we want to avoid terrorist infiltrating American land, I support the process, even though immigrants may be fleeing there country we cannot be naive. A suggestion for your writing is that, you should be more elaborate on your “freedom…[Read more]
Hi Rachel, I appreciate your concern about the dolphins but you must consider the culture factor of the Japanese culture. I would first like to state that I don’t agree with them killing the dolphins but we don’t have to boycott the 2020 Olympics in Japan. Thought centuries the Japanese have relied on there vast Oceans to supply them with food,…[Read more]
Global war-like catastrophies has caused great diversions between nations and communities, It is really heartbreaking what some people have to go through even though they didn’t part take in any of the conflict.
Hi Cullen. I was able to read the first paragraph and I immediately noticed the topic of Steroids and the usage of them; you should not use Stanton as your cover Image because I know for a fact that he does not use and performance enhancing drugs. The whole article was misleading because you decided to address job placement? Steroids and creating…[Read more]
My dearest Fredrick. Have you personally experienced this “Pursuit of Happiness” ? Your article seems to be personal in a way that lets the audience feel close. Love the statistic you choose to use. I also agree with the money ideology, that is so true-money doesn’t make us happy.
Hi David. Nice post! When addressing someone for the first time in your article, you should address them by there full name. Just saying Colin, can mean anyone. I also totally agree with how the kneeling message is being lost.
I have read about the Aral sea in a few documentaries and articles in the past. In this article I want to give you the whole story and after effects of this incident that has permanently affected the Russian
Dear Allison, Your article has very good examples and sources from where you acquired your information. As I was reading I noticed that before each paragraph you dive right into the topic, next time maybe try to explain more or introduce your topic and what you are about to talk about. Overall, great job.
Dear Micheal, Please be more specific and elaborative in your thoughts. There is a lot more to what your topic is, you only share one major aspect of “Americans sharing the basic freedom given”. Also who is in the picture? Explain more about him and what else he did
Dear Devon, Thank you for sharing about your past life experiences. I enjoyed hearing about what its like living in Detroit and your concert for the city. You sound very concerned and wanting to help your community. I wish you the best of luck for the future.
Hi Taleb, My name is Ethan and Iam from Judge Memorial Catholic High School. Your story is interesting but its also hard to read along, there is no explanation to anything and the structure is a bit off. You are using the slanted words in the wrong context, they are for titles of book or other material. You are also using the “;” symbol wrong.…[Read more]
Hi Luis , My name is Ethan and Iam from Judge Memorial Catholic High School. Your article was amazing, the rhythm of everything was smooth. I loved how you included statistics in your beginning paragraph, but maybe next time write a more inviting or content informational paragraph. The rest of your article was great, my last critique is to explain…[Read more]
Hi Rosalinda. I am a student from Judge Memorial Catholic High School, Thank you for sharing your views and perspective on the incident at Charlottesville, I love how personal and open you were with your stories; some suggestions for your first paragraph, add some links, sources or articles about Charlottesville, another item I would like to…[Read more]
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