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Eden commented on the post, Truth about about America 1 year ago
Dear Saoronn:
I am interested your by poem, “Truth about about America” because we should be able to find unity and peace between everyone. We should also try putting our differences aside and focus on the good things..
One part of your poem that stands out for me is where you describe what the rallys were doing to each other and how the KKK had…[Read more]-
Eden commented on the post, My Favorite Places , People and Things 1 year ago
Dear Jai:
I am interested your by poem and photograph, “My Favorite Places, People and Things” because Iive in New York and we don’t really see things like that in the picture. I also think it’s interesting how you described the garden.
One part of your poem that stands out for me is where you describe the rose and how you add “love” into it too…[Read more] -
Eden commented on the post, Dancing my next step 1 year ago
Dear Anais :
I am interested by your poem “Dancing my next step” because… you describe a big turning point in your life which is really interesting.
One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is: “ At that point I knew I had to change for the better because I didn’t want to be stuck anymore. Also wanted to take the next step of my life.” I…[Read more] -
Eden commented on the post, Everything You Can and Cannot See 1 year, 1 month ago
Dear Abigail:
I am fascinated by the way you described your emotion, your poem, “Everything You Can and Cannot See,” because you managed to show different emotions through experiences. You used different locations which all described different emotion such as the word use of “pain” and “light” but are yet still are where you’re from.
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Eden commented on the post, Where I'm From 1 year, 1 month ago
Dear Mariam,
I am fascinated by how you managed to speak on where you’re from in your poem, “Where I’m from,” because You manage to describe what you have been through and the description of your neighborhood without actually letting people know where you’re from.
One line that stands out for me is, “ Where mafias and gangueros paint the p…[Read more] -
Eden wrote a new post, Where I'm From 1 year, 2 months ago
I am from thewood floor in my bedroomI’m from the 1 train across the streetFrom Carrie and LouisI’m from know it alls and people whoknow nothingFrom shut up and go awayI’m from not having any religious belie
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Eden wrote a new post, High School 1 year, 2 months ago
It was hard leavingfrom middle school tohigh school, what wasnot easy was the bigtransition betweenI was scared to tryway more people nowIwant to go backmy grades were betterbut I made friendsnow I wish I stay
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Eden wrote a new post, She Remembers 1 year, 2 months ago
She Remembers growing up watching horror moviesShe RemembersBeing in love with ThemShe Remembers Her dad playing old rock music in the morningShe RemembersGoing to the deli at 2amShe Remembers Living alone with
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Eden, your poem is beautiful. You capture the memories of childhood perfectly. We often remember specific details but forget others. The way you described what you remembered and what you did not brought me to look back on my own childhood. Don’t stop creating, you have a knack for it.
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Eden,
In your poem, you touch on the complications of growing up. We often get so lost in how fast time flies that we only remember general details about certain things in our lives. People absolutely can still remember something right down to the minute years after it happened, but those can often be either really happy memories, say a wedding, or very traumatic memories, the loss of a loved one. We often like to remember the area in between though. The things that are going to keep us happy and you captured that beautifully.
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Eden became a registered member 1 year, 3 months ago
Eden, thank you so much for writing this. When you said “It was hard to move from Middle School to High School” I totally related to this. Keep up the good writing!