Hello comrade, I appreciate your use of links in the actual essay so the data is easily accesible and how you have very diverse sets of data so that many parts of the salvation armies’ benefits. (Sal was here).
Zooie-mama, what an epic blog post. Firstly, nice evidence use with having 3 interviews so you can get 1 more actual oakland person instead of the 2 minimum. Also, you cited your work well so you won’t be sued. Only I think typos hold it back maybe but maybe i’m illiterate who knows.
sup gamer, your epic work is epic indeed. i greatly enjoyed the example giving at the beginning of your work. you allows a reader to understand more of thy problem making it easier to explain. i also liked that you put in the opinions of the community so more people can share their opinion. this essay was very epic.
I really enjoyed how in the beginning you drew the reader in by starting off with “ imagine a game “ I feel like that’s what really drew me in and had me thinking and actually made it kind of easier to understand your piece. Overall your topic sounds like a really interesting topic, and I’m glad you brought it forth and wrote about it because if I’m being honest I didn’t really quiet pay attention to anything involving red lining, so thank you for writing about this and publishing it. I also enjoyed how you included some background information in the beginning so that also made it easier for me to understand for long this has been going for. Thank you for your writing and I hope to see what other pieces you write about.
Wowee, thanks for posting a very personal topic on how you are dealing with this very sensitive subject matter. It must have been a difficult thing to post this out to the interwebz. But it’s a very good thing you did because it can give others (like myself) a perspective on how devastating it must be to bisexual and not getting support from your…[Read more]
Thank you so much for sharing your poetry. It is really good. A line that stood out to me was
“Knowing that they didn’t mess up
Power messed them up” because I think that line could have different meanings. I like that this poem addressed the problems of money and the problems of not having money. Thank you so much for sharing and I look forward to reading your next post.
What an elaborate poem. It’s almost deceiving how each line is so short yet the over all poem has a very deep message behind it. And it’s very impressive to me that you were able to convey such a deep message with such few lines and words. I don’t think I could ever do something like that. I also appreciate the bits of humor in your poem. Overall, your poem was amazing. Keep up the great work!
I appreciate your artist statement and shadow box for explaining how you aren’t what you seem like seed. It shows how you aren’t just a generalized person but very specific in who you are. BUT, you didn’t space after a period once. But everything else is sick.
Who is this young man, and what does he represent about himself? Well, I’ll tell you. I am me. To begin, my first identity that I will explain is that I am an introverted person that tends to spend their time e
I am amazed by how your shadow box looks like because it really shows who you are as a person. One part of your shadow box that stands out to me is the images you have because they all have different meanings. I also like how so of them you drew so it tells me you are someone who likes to draw a lot and that it may be your hobby you do. Thank you for your shadow box/art and I look forward to seeing the new things you will create.
I love how your shadow box came out. When I saw you working on it and adding pictures to your box, I knew it would come out great. Your shadow box is definitely the funniest one I’ve seen and that really reflects how you are as a person because you always make jokes and are funny. And that’s the main aspect I like about your shadow box, that your personality reflects on your project. Keep up the good work.
Dear Elizabeth, I like how you put half of your whole artist’s statement with your ethnicity. I also adore that when you were talking about ethnicity stereotypes, you put that you as an individual aren’t those but others might be which makes it so you don’t sound so preachy about it. I also think that putting Sonoma State University little pocke…[Read more]
This is a youth-powered social network that was started in 2003 by a group of teachers from local sites of the National Writing Project.
We merged several earlier blogging projects. We have found that there are many advantages to bringing students together in one site that lives beyond any particular class. It's easier for individual students to read and write about their own passions, to connect with other students, comment on each other's work, and create multimedia posts for each other. Further, it's been exciting for us to pool our knowledge about curriculum, connected learning, and digital literacies.
If being part of such a community makes sense to you, we invite you to join us. We welcome all youth and any teacher interested in having students publish online and participate in the give and take of a social network like Youth Voices.