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    Dear Congress and President Trump,

     

    We are students from Fremont High in Oakland, CA. We have been researching about Nuclear Weapons and which country has the largest  arsenal of nuclear weapons. We found t

    Prototype: Raising Awareness About Nuclear Weapons

    Dear Congress and President Trump,   We are students from Fremont High in Oakland, CA. We have been researching about Nuclear Weapons and which country has the largest  arsenal of nuclear weapons. We found that Russia and the U.S.A are in...

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    • You guys should start off by telling us what is your argument instead of giving us straight facts because we don’t know what your talking about and you’re just stating facts already. Your thesis is unclear I don’t really understand the argument you are trying to make. You should start off with what is a nuclear weapon and why is it bad. Why is it important for us to not get in a nuclear war? You should put how much money the U.S spends on education and health care compared to the military and explain why this is a problem.

    • Ahmir’s suggestions are all very good. Some context could definitely help readers understand more about your issue. Since your solution idea is that the government should spend less on the military and nuclear weapons in particular, more explanation connecting to that would strengthen your message.

    • I think this a very important topic and you provided very good stats to show the reality of mass nuclear buildups. You should add an argument driven thesis right off the bat so we know why you are talking about nuclear buildups. Other than that, well done.

    • Do you think that this message to trump will stop him from spending $16 billion to $ 25 billion per year on weapons? What will happen when someone trys to go to war with use and we haven’t made any new weapons or the new ones we have arent good anymore

    • Your evidence and facts are really good when it talks about your topic for nuclear weapons. I couldn’t really find a thesis to this, so it was kind of confusing for me to understand. I would suggest piecing what you got from your evidence and solutions into making a thesis. You should also broaden your solution, like giving a number to show how much money should be given to education, how it will be given to poor people, and helping veterans.

    • Creating nuclear bombs and having war with other countries is all not worth it it, because there’s innocent people involved here. They wasted too much money on their weapons but instead they could have used that money to help support those who are in need of it more than the nuclear bomb. If the U.S and North Korea get into a fight/war and drops nuclear bombs at each other, what’s going to be the benefit because they’re gonna be in a war, people die, enviroment gets affected then they both step aside/back depending on who won, after that it starts all over again. They don’t realize that what they’re doing is harming many many many people including kids and babies.

    • It shows that you guys have done a lot of research all of the evidence is good, you have good idea about nuclear bombs and the effects of a war. Need to address solution better. Provide a more concrete solution, develop it more you have a good start.

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