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  • Michelle, I really enjoyed reading your article, I feel like you took a new path with this assignment. Your usage of sources really helped build your argument, especially being that they represented a view that differs from most I have seen on the subject. You also established the United States as a complicated place which as all things do has…Read More

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    Emma, I really enjoyed your article and I completely agree with your stance. I would say the highlight of your piece was you making a connection of self growth and wisdom. Another strong area of your article is how you included simple and complex examples, this helped widen your audience. Your discussion of self-destructive behavior was very…Read More

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    Your future and your past are defining features inside of you that throughout your life will struggle and strive to coexist with one another. The question is quite a controversial one, however, not a new topic.

    Can Your Past Exist in Your Present?

    Your future and your past are defining features inside of you that throughout your life will struggle and strive to coexist with one another. The question is quite a controversial one, however, not a new topic. This is the...

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    I liked your argument because it did state very well, the reasons for your choice in source, however, I believe that by using multiple sources you could strengthen your argument by showing consistency. Two other things that I think could help your argument deals with the phrasing you use. In your discussion you use a lot of short…Read More

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    American creed and values have been an ever changing concept, heavily  influenced by numerous factors that tend to change over time. Some would say that it’s human nature for people to strongly adhere to their co

    The Middle Ground of a Hot Issue

    American creed and values have been an ever changing concept, heavily  influenced by numerous factors that tend to change over time. Some would say that it’s human nature for people to strongly adhere to their core values and beliefs...

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    • Bailey, this is very well written. I agree in the fact that American values differ to everybody. I loved how you narrowed down the answers to ” What are America’s values?” into subcategories.

    • Bailey, I agree with your point that the concept of American Creed is constantly changing and is very different than what it was in the past. Your piece is very well written and I really liked how you broke everything down while also making it very well organized. Good job.

    • Bailey,
      I love how you start this piece it is a really good “hook”. I also like your word choice it strengthens your argument. I also loved how you organized your piece.

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