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Bailey commented on the post, America is Diverse, but is it Equal? 5 months, 1 week ago
Michelle, I really enjoyed reading your article, I feel like you took a new path with this assignment. Your usage of sources really helped build your argument, especially being that they represented a view that differs from most I have seen on the subject. You also established the United States as a complicated place which as all things do has…[Read more]
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Bailey commented on the post, Comfort Zones 5 months, 1 week ago
Emma, I really enjoyed your article and I completely agree with your stance. I would say the highlight of your piece was you making a connection of self growth and wisdom. Another strong area of your article is how you included simple and complex examples, this helped widen your audience. Your discussion of self-destructive behavior was very…[Read more]
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Bailey wrote a new post, Can Your Past Exist in Your Present? 7 months, 2 weeks ago
Your future and your past are defining features inside of you that throughout your life will struggle and strive to coexist with one another. The question is quite a controversial one, however, not a new topic.
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Bailey commented on the post, What does being an American mean? 8 months, 1 week ago
Danny,
I liked your argument because it did state very well, the reasons for your choice in source, however, I believe that by using multiple sources you could strengthen your argument by showing consistency. Two other things that I think could help your argument deals with the phrasing you use. In your discussion you use a lot of short…[Read more]
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Bailey wrote a new post, The Middle Ground of a Hot Issue 8 months, 1 week ago
American creed and values have been an ever changing concept, heavily influenced by numerous factors that tend to change over time. Some would say that it’s human nature for people to strongly adhere to their co
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Bailey, this is very well written. I agree in the fact that American values differ to everybody. I loved how you narrowed down the answers to ” What are America’s values?” into subcategories.
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Bailey, I agree with your point that the concept of American Creed is constantly changing and is very different than what it was in the past. Your piece is very well written and I really liked how you broke everything down while also making it very well organized. Good job.
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Bailey,
I love how you start this piece it is a really good “hook”. I also like your word choice it strengthens your argument. I also loved how you organized your piece.
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Bailey commented on the post, Should Bottled Water Be Banned? 8 months, 2 weeks ago
Penelope,
I appreciate your writing of this article, this is a very important issue that not many people recognize or act on to improve. I will say though, that I did find some things that I think you could use to improve your argument. One of the main things is to do a facts check, in your post you said that only 38 out of 50 billion water…[Read more]
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