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  • Dawning commented on the post, We Pray

    Thank you!

  • Dawning commented on the post, We Pray

    Thank you so much!

  • Dawning commented on the post, Use Your Breath

    Hey Lauren, I really liked your poem, “Use Your Breath.” It is such an easy piece to follow along and relate to. I love how calming, yet, powerful this piece is. Great job!

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    We Pray

    In the dawn of day We pray We pray so our families feel safe  So that one's happiness may not be overshadowed by anger and frustration We pray to feel loved  And cherished  And to bring about certainty and prosperity in life We conquer with love...

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    • Dear Dawning,

      I am stunned by your post, “We Pray,” because it it sums up what it’s like to do such thing. And I feel like I really relate to how you feel when you do it.

      One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is: “Tomorrow will be another day of believing and finding our inner peace.” I think this is nice because it reminds us how we should take things day by day.

      Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next, because based off of this it seems like you’d have other nice things to share:)). Again, thank you for your writing!

      -Sophia G.

    • Hey Dawning, this is a great poem. I especially like the comforting positivity of it, it makes it a great read.

      -Atu

    • Dear Dawning,

      I am astonished by your post “We Pray” because it really makes me know someone feels the same way as I do when I am doing this. It really captivates me because everything you are saying I can relate to and when you can relate to something you feel a sense of conception which is what I felt when I first read this. Something that stood out to me specifically was when you said, “We have the power and control to do whatever our decisive poetic minds want Our decisions impact the world, good or bad But good will always trump evil intentions.” It is really beautiful the way you were able to put such powerful words into a sentence and have the message be very powerful.

      Thank you for writing this amazing peace I hope to read more from you soon because your writing is beautiful and inspiring.
      -Miranda Chavez

    • Dear Dawning,

      I am fascinated by your Poetic Writing “We Pay because it explains the happiness of one’s day, to feel love and prayed. With no intentions of darkness.
      One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is, “As we come together as missing puzzle pieces”. I think this is a strong sentence because it pieces life to believing another day will be my accomplished day.
      Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next, because its cool knowing what comes next. Somebody like you needs our feedback

    • I am fascinated by your poem, “We pray” because it captures the beauty and sensations that an individual may feel when they allow their thoughts to fill up with good thoughts while praying. This poem also demonstrates all the beneficial things that come out of praying. 

      One sentence that you wrote that stands out to me is, “ Our decisions impact the world, good or bad. But good will always trump evil intentions” I strongly agree with this statement because it is a fact in my eyes and I feel like people should have this kind of mindset. We have the ability to choose how our decisions affect our lives and their outcomes of them. Yes, sometimes things don’t go the way you planned it out to be or there are some days where you have bad days but the only things that matter is how you choose to perceive that thought or day and the way that you let it affect you. You should always be thinking positively and your poem perfectly captured this thought. 

      Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next because I was truly inspired by your poem and its beauty

      -Valarie Gonzalez

    • Dear dawning,
      I am deeply touched by your poem, “we pray”because it is shows the struggles and joys of daily life.
      one thing that really stood out to me is when you said, “But good will always trump evil intentions And if mistakes occur We will counteract with good intention  As long as we believe and feel the peace” this speaks to me because it shows that things are not always going to be perfect, we make miskates and mess up, but you just have to get up and persue with good intentions.
      Thank you for sharing this, I look forward to seeing what you write in the future because I really enjoyed your poem.

    • Dear Dawning;
       
      I am moved by your post, “We pray,” because I like the way you express your words in a poem but at the same time as a reflection. It seems like a reflection at the same time because you talk about how good a prayer is and the good fruits that it attracts.
       
      One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is: “Tomorrow will be another day of believing and finding our inner peace.” I think this is inspiring because it motivates me that if you had a bad day today, maybe tomorrow will be the best day of all. Just as there are good days there are also bad ones and you should not be agitated by that.
       
      Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next, because I like this type of reading because apart from being a reflection type, it helps motivate you. Your phrases are a motivation that not because everything goes wrong means that evil wins, if today was not the day, maybe tomorrow it will be.
       
      Jenifer

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    Darkness

    Darkness, The definition of shame and fearall feelings in which was driving through my mindMy fears unravel one by oneas darkness surrounds me All of a sudden,The sky rumbles as clouds fold in,dark gray as if it were Halloween nightYet the...

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