• Dear Cristina,

    I really like your piece. I did not know this about you, so I learned something new about you. It sucks that the other students used to judge you just because you were from Oakland. I really like that you did not let that bother you and you were proud to be from Oakland. I’m glad you did not stay in San Fransisco because you got to…[Read more]

    • Dear David,

      I had no idea that this happend to you. This comic you created moved my heart. I liked how you and your sibilings stayed together no matter what. Even if the situations is your parents seperating. When you mentioned the phrase “whatever it happens we will always stick together” that just show me how strong your connections are with your brothers. Not a lot of people have this and I hope you recognized that you’re very lucky. I hope this connection is growing even stronger and that it’ll never stop. Wish you the best. Peace dude.

  • Dear Saul,

    I really like your piece because you talk about your brother and that has to do with family dynamics and you also talk about love and how you love soccer. I only wished that you still enjoyed playing in the rain like you used to. I want to hear more from you life experiences. Pues chido guey.

  • David commented on the post, 2 Trips 1 year, 6 months ago

    Dear Gerardo,

    I really like your memoir piece “2 Trips” because I got to know you a little better from reading your piece. I never knew that you were a quiet kid because to me, you are very outgoing. It seems that these trips really helped you step out of your comfort zone. I really liked that you helped others and that you enjoyed doing it. We…[Read more]

  • I can only describe my family one way. Hardworking. My dad wakes up everyday at 5 or 6 am in the morning, works a very physical job as an electrician for around 12 hours. My mom cleans houses and teaches a Zumba

    • Dear David,

      All the other memoirs I’ve read are poems. Your piece was different, you wrote it in paragraph forms. I learned a lot about your family and everyone role in the family. I enjoyed your writing. You are a really good writer, keep it up!

    • Dear David,

      I enjoyed reading your unique writing style and especially the part where you described your life as an open book. It’s really nice to know where you come from and why you do the things you do. This is proving the person you are today will do you best in the long run. I’d also like to join one of your mom’s zumba classes.

    • dear David,
      I really appreciate this piece of yours. It really shows a new side to you, and kinda explains why you seem to be happy most of the time. I like the figurative language you use when you write, “I thought about all the chapters of my life, and how my life book had just gotten bigger and more empty. Ready to be filled with my journey to happiness.” It just shows how optimistic yo are, and that you are ready to face anything thrown your way. You deserve so much happiness in your life, because I agree that you are strong and hard working. This shows so much about you, and how you came to be you.

    • Dear David,

      I really enjoy reading all your pieces of work you’ve done so far. They are very nice and creative. I like how you talked about your family and how you were open to talk about it because I know people don’t really like to open up and talk about their family situations. I am amaze of how good your work is and I hope you keep this uo and do even better. #Noeyebrowgand

    • David — This is more of a description of your family than a memoir / short story about them… Can you choose ONE moment from your family’s life that shows how hardworking they are? I would plan to revise BEFORE you submit your final draft of this piece.

    • Dear David,
      I really enjoyed this because my dad is also an electrician, so I know that it is very hard work. But I also related to this because my family and I are also immigrants, and this reminded me that we shouldn’t let that stop us from achieving our goals. keep up the good writing!

  • Dear Angela,
    Your poem “Why I’m Artistic As Hell” is really powerful. I really like how you express yourself in a way that you like, and seems like you do not care about what others think about you. I like how you said that you are someone different everyday but you are still yourself. Keep being artistic as hell and keep making them awesome…[Read more]

  • Dear Cristina,
    I am moved by your poem, “Why I’m Careful As Hell” because I appreciate that you care about others, and most important you care about yourself. I also like the flow of your poem. One part of your poem that stands out to me is the end because it shows how in order to care about others, you must care about yourself first. Your poem…[Read more]

  • I’ve throw away food

    While others go to bed on an empty stomach

    I take 30 minute showers

    While others don’t have fresh water

    I complain when I don’t have the latest smartphone

    While others do not

    • Dear David,
      Your poem was very relatable in a way. Though we’re very different. When you mentioned that you had to be fortunate because you were an immigrant it really hit me because my parents are immigrants too. And you mentioned that you have to be fortunate because though you may not have everything, and maybe you’re not rich, you have more unlike others who are really struggling. So you choose to be fortunate, because the things you have would be a blessing to others. I really enjoyed your poem and I look forward to reading more of your writing soon. :))))))))))))

    • I like your memoir a lot. It made me reflect on how much I complain and that I shouldn’t be complaining at all. This was so inspiring and definitely got me to think. This poem can help people change because some of us are more fortunate than others and we need to know how to be thankful for what we have.

    • Dear David,

      I can somewhat relate to your poem. Your poem is very creative and it really shows who you really are a person. That one person who appreciates even the little that you have. That is a characteristic a lot of people don’t have and that you should be proud of having. Having this skill will make a better person and you will be able to create new friendships in which you will be grateful to have in the future. A few line that stood out to me were the following… ” Yes, I live in poverty. Yes, I am a Mexican Immigrant. But there are always people who have it worse than me.” This line really stood out to me because you are acknowledging that people have it worst so maybe that’s a reason why I never hear you complaining about things you like or not like. This really does shows a powerful mind that you have. Keep this mentally up and you will get far in the future.

    • Dear, David I really like your poem “Why I’m Fortunate as Hell” because I know I can relate to it of course for example me getting a new phone I’m gonna brag about it and I think it’s really inspiring because it shows people you can do these things but real life people around the world can’t because they probably can’t afford things and sometimes I think people around should deserve to have a new phone and freshwater but so far I really like your poem great job!

  • Hello Gildardo,

    Yes I play soccer. I am a defender and I like to work as a team with my friends. I like that soccer helps me forget about any problems and I can just have fun. By the way, Barcelona is the best team!!!!!!!!

  • Dear Daniel,
    I am very thankful for posting this post. I think that you make a very strong argument and I believe that you can change the opinions of some. The reason why I am thankful is because I know many people who smoke marijuana, and I do not believe that it is a bad thing if they are doing it in a safe. I think that is would be a good…[Read more]

  • Dear Gildardo,

    I am really inspired by your piece, “Professional Soccer in Oakland” because I agree with everything you said. It stood out to me that you tied soccer to school and life. How soccer motivates athletes to do better in school. If we had a professional soccer team in Oakland, kids will be more motivated to do better because they would…[Read more]

  • Dear Marlon,
    I am happy with your post, “Name Memoir” because I got to know you a little more. Now I know why you work hard in school, in soccer and in your life. Your last sentence stood out to me because you show how you want to continue a legacy with a name. Your post reminds me of my last name because I also want to continue a legacy with my…[Read more]

  • My name is David Luna, and that is how I introduce myself to the rest of the world. However, David Luna are not two names that are tied together and make me a whole individual, they are two different identities

    • Dear David,
      One sentence you wrote that stands out to me is ” David Luna are not two names that are tied together and make me a whole individual, they are two different identities that battle and balance each other.” I think this is because it helps me understand the two identities you have regarding your name. I feel like people don’t really know what this is and they believe that their whole name identifies them by who they are and not one name as an individual.

    • Dear, David,
      Don’t you play soccer. I seen you play for the school you raw. Your post is strong and really stand out and have a strong meaning for each of your names. Your hook got me into reading more and more really got into knowing what your two names identify as. I agree with you on the David part when you said, “Taps on the shoulder and lead you to watch T.V” well I don’t watch tv but I do be playing Fornite with the bros and take straight W but, again I have to do my Homework so I could get good grades.
      Sincerely, Daniel

    • It is a sign of strength and maturity to move more toward “balance”, than “battle”. Both sides are important pieces of you, but they must work together to help you BOTH be successful AND enjoy this beautiful life! 🙂 How excited! I’m proud of you!

  • Dear Julian Alvarez,

    I am very very happy by your work of art “shadow box” because I got to learn new things about you. Even though the box was not finished, it was cool to learn what you like. One part of your artwork that stood out was that you put that purple was for both females and males because that proves you have respect for everyone.…[Read more]

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