Dear David,

I had no idea that this happend to you. This comic you created moved my heart. I liked how you and your sibilings stayed together no matter what. Even if the situations is your parents seperating. When you mentioned the phrase “whatever it happens we will always stick together” that just show me how strong your connections are with your brothers. Not a lot of people have this and I hope you recognized that you’re very lucky. I hope this connection is growing even stronger and that it’ll never stop. Wish you the best. Peace dude.

Dear David,

All the other memoirs I’ve read are poems. Your piece was different, you wrote it in paragraph forms. I learned a lot about your family and everyone role in the family. I enjoyed your writing. You are a really good writer, keep it up!

Dear David,

I enjoyed reading your unique writing style and especially the part where you described your life as an open book. It’s really nice to know where you come from and why you do the things you do. This is proving the person you are today will do you best in the long run. I’d also like to join one of your mom’s zumba classes.

dear David,
I really appreciate this piece of yours. It really shows a new side to you, and kinda explains why you seem to be happy most of the time. I like the figurative language you use when you write, “I thought about all the chapters of my life, and how my life book had just gotten bigger and more empty. Ready to be filled with my journey to happiness.” It just shows how optimistic yo are, and that you are ready to face anything thrown your way. You deserve so much happiness in your life, because I agree that you are strong and hard working. This shows so much about you, and how you came to be you.

Dear David,

I really enjoy reading all your pieces of work you’ve done so far. They are very nice and creative. I like how you talked about your family and how you were open to talk about it because I know people don’t really like to open up and talk about their family situations. I am amaze of how good your work is and I hope you keep this uo and do even better. #Noeyebrowgand

David — This is more of a description of your family than a memoir / short story about them… Can you choose ONE moment from your family’s life that shows how hardworking they are? I would plan to revise BEFORE you submit your final draft of this piece.

Dear David,
I really enjoyed this because my dad is also an electrician, so I know that it is very hard work. But I also related to this because my family and I are also immigrants, and this reminded me that we shouldn’t let that stop us from achieving our goals. keep up the good writing!