I think this was well written. I liked your points a lot and thought they were strong. However, I disagree. I think we should have stronger background checks and we should stop the gun show loophole. We also need mental heath background checks.
Kyle, I liked your post a lot. It was very convincing and did a good job of getting your point across. You used lots of different sources and I thought it was good the way you broke down ideals such as the american dream and related them to your argument. I like how not only did you have a lot of sources, but they were very diverse. Overall, I…[Read more]
Thank you for your feedback. I think that your points are valid and I appreciate your comment. Agree with almost all your suggestions, however, the reason I started most of the paragraphs with a quote was kind of because I wanted to build them each around a quote, so I did that for structural reasons rather than just because I didn’t want to make…[Read more]
What does it mean to be an American? What is our american Creed? Ask different people these questions, get different answers. I believe that being an american should be about two words, liberty and equality. To
I liked your argument because it did state very well, the reasons for your choice in source, however, I believe that by using multiple sources you could strengthen your argument by showing consistency. Two other things that I think could help your argument deals with the phrasing you use. In your discussion you use a lot of short sentences, this prevents the article from flowing and I think that the post may benefit from the combining of certain sentences. The last thing that I wanted to add was that I feel like your article was missing some introduction points, as in introducing your source before going into a direct quote and citation.
Thank you for your feedback. I think that your points are valid and I appreciate your comment. Agree with almost all your suggestions, however, the reason I started most of the paragraphs with a quote was kind of because I wanted to build them each around a quote, so I did that for structural reasons rather than just because I didn’t want to make introduction points. Other than that, I agree with all of your comments.
Hi Danny, your post was great! I really liked your usage of the declaration of independence. It’s one of most impotent documents second only to the constitution. You brought up many good points during your passage, and the only thing I would of preferred is that you used more examples of the values that we as Americans hold dear.
David, the question you ask is very deep and difficult to answer, however it is an important question. This post stood out to me because it doesn’t have an easy answer. The answers differ from person to person and i think this is something everyone should figure out. Good job on asking the tough questions in life.
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