Let me introduce you to to Oakland. I believe that Oakland is violent because of what I have seen in the city. On a daily basis all I see when I am driving down the streets are police cars in Oakland and when
I like your blog because it has some good information and agree with you that violence in Oakland needs to stop. I agree with you that gun violence is also one big problem in Oakland and that it needs to stop. One thing you could of done better is maybe add more sources so you have more evidence to support your claim.
Dear Daniel, I love the topic of your blog. I think these ideas to stop and prevent violence are really smart. I totally think law enforcement should bond with the community. One question I have is that did this project actually lower gun violence percentages? And what other steps can we take to prevent gun violence inside our own community instead of just between police officers? Good job on your blog, Daniel.
My poem connects to Romeo and Juliet because in the book, there are two families at war for money and power. My life is not the same, but similar because my parents are at war. Thank you for reading my poem.
Thank you so much for sharing your poetry. A line that stood out to me was, “Hate is like a storm ready to cause a massive amount of damage”, I think this is very well described and, is so true, that hate has such a great effect on people. I think this poem is very powerful and I know from a personal experience when family fights, it can be really hard for everyone. I think this is a hard topic to talk about, however at the end of the day, disagreements can stress out everyone. I’m look forward to reading your next post.
Dear Daniel, your poem is amazing! One line that stood out to me was where you talked about how hate is like a storm because it causes a lot of damage. I really agree with this line. Good job connecting it to the 2 families fighting in Romeo and Juliet. Thank you so much for sharing your poem!
Your poem was very good I like how you chose a different topic than just love. I also like all the metaphors and similes you used in your poem. This poem was very accurate because usually when parents are arguing they don´t think we hear them or understand but we really do and that’s why it was a good example when you said ¨Hurt by blades stabbing my mind and word’s hurting my ears.¨ In your poem I also like when you said “Pain can be a scorpion wanting to poison your mind.” I believe you are trying to say the pain you go through because your parents disagreements get to you and and go to your head and will make you stressed out and cause you to turn to something that you think will ease the pain but really cause something more serious than you thought the actual outcome would be. Your poem has a lot of meanings and messages in it even though your topic was feuding between families causing tragedies so great job!
I liked how you bring up a true and very real problem. Familys do cause stress. which can reflect onto people and their kids. I really like how you used the metaphor,“Pain can be a scorpion wanting to poison your mind.” I found this really interesting because when parents fight they are hurting their kids and that can be like poison. Overall your quote really MAKES your paper. Keep up the good work – Christina
I chose shades, a book and anime statues and action figures for my shadow box. I chose these objects because this is evidence that I am a big fan of many things. I want people to know who I am like no one else
I am pleased to see your shadow box because it looks great. The boxe’s color looks great and what is inside is just awesome. I like how you put those characters of dragon ball in the box, i personally like dragon ball so it’s nice to see someone is putting some dragon ball on theirs. I think that this shadow box is great and that you should keep on with the good work.
I really appreciate your shadow box because of the story behind it and how you explain that these objects really matter to you. I can really understand the favorite things that you enjoy. I also really like anime. My favorite part of your shadow box is your shadow box statement. The shadow box statement really reminded me how…[Read more]
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