Hi Clara,
I think that this whole concept is really interesting. Here is an article about why hotels skip the 13th floor. https://www.orbitz.com/blog/2015/02/friday-13th-truth-behind-hotels-missing-13th-floors/
Great job! I am excited to ready more about your topic
-Maggie

Clara, I think this topic is so interesting. I didn’t know that this fear was so common that it had an official name. Great job I look forward to seeing what you write in the future.

Clara, This is such a cool topic you re writing about. I had no idea there was such thing as a fear of the number 13. It’s almost funny to think about. Looking at some of these previous comments and an observation I’ve made is that hotels and buildings usually skip from the 12th floor right to the 14th floor because of some people’s fear of the number 13. I would love to hear more about different weird and quirky phobias there are in the world! Keep up the good work.

Your introduction to an opposing opinion is really good. I like the contrast of ideas.

I really like how you presented your idea but perhaps add more detail.

You addressed the issue in a quick and concise manner that shows a plethora of valid points. However the opposing ideals of the death penalty are not presented.

I like how you illustrate two different sides of the issue in detail. It’s reflective of how to issue is currently being debated and the common opinions on it.

This is a really interesting piece, Clara. I enjoyed how you presented both sides of the argument and gave them equal weight. I especially liked when you said “… it is only an industry that benefits attorneys and criminals meanwhile taking taxpayers dollars.” The thought of the death penalty benefiting lawyers and taking taxpayers’ money is something I had never thought about. I only wish the piece was a little longer and had more detail. I look forward to seeing more of your writing because it’s very concise and straightforward.

Clara, I think you provide really valid reasons as to why people think the death penalty should be either legal, or illegal. The quote from Pope Francis was very interesting to read and taught me how the Catholic Church views this issue, which I didn’t know before. However, I have read other sources that talk about how much more money is spent by housing criminals than by sentencing them to the death penalty, so I would like to know which is more accurate. If you find out more about the money spent, I would love to hear more about it.

I enjoyed how you incorporated the opposing views of the death penalty. I appreciate that you brought up this topic but I would disagree and say that some criminals would commit a crime due to the death penalty. The death penalty would mean minimal jail time and you could also argue that its better then rotting away in a jail cell for the rest of your life.

Hey Clara, I enjoy the way you started with a strong opening statement by offering the proper definition of the “death penalty”, and thus, starting the discussion. Although I do appreciate the showcasing of both perspectives of the story, I do believe you should dive deeper into one side of the story, or if you are commiting to touch both sides, at least provide more evidence for the pro death penalty side like you did for the ones opposing the death penalty. Overall, this passage was well-written.

I like the way you introduced the meaning of the death penalty and why it is a concern in todays day and age. I am one of the people that believe that the death penalty should be illegal because it is expensive and no person deserves death. As prison break has shown conviction is not solid. Proof will always be around and there is no 100% guilty person. Death may be better than living in captivity for your whole life, but in my opinion the death penalty should be the prisoners choice if they are serving a long sentence.