First of all I love how you talked about a strong and really important topic in our city, State, and overall country. Something else I really like is how you format your article (by topics). When you use Obama’s quote, “My fellow Americans, we are and always will be a nation of immigrants. We were strangers once, too.” Thi…[Read more]
I’m so happy you chose to talk about a very strong problem in our community. When reading your poem I noticed that you talk about how ICE looking is looking for criminals in our area but they were actually child trafficking. This really caught my eyes because ICE is using their power for evil. Something that seemed outrageous w…[Read more]
Recently in Oakland it has been more apparent that people are moving out and others are moving in because of gentrification. Gentrification happens when a group of people with more money come into a low income
I really like what you’ve wrote in your blog “ Gentrification is Hurting Us’ about the Gentrification in Oakland and the impact is having. One sentence that stood out to me was “ I wouldn’t have known that this was going on in my community if I didn’t learn about it in class” from Jasper Wilson. This stood out because a lot of people aren’t noticing the huge impact is making towards people who hardly have money to eat. I totally agree with you that people who wants or is working at San Francisco are moving in because of the slightly “big” price difference. I’ve known a lot of people who are moving out and for me is a big thing because my mom have to pay a lot and she’s a single mom with 3 kids. I really appreciate for showing and bringing this topic out.
Thanks for your writing, hope seeing more from you!
I am amazed by your essay “Gentrification is Hurting Us” because you talk about the realities happening in our community that people might be afraid to talk about. One part in your essay that stood out to me is where you talk about how rent is increasing and the impact it has on people. I love how you included a picture of a chart in your essay it makes it stand out. Thank you for your work, I look forward to what you write next.
I LOVED your poem. I can visualize the way Oakland is with your poem and how our youth is exposed to hate. I also like the way you used the feuds with oakland to compare with Romeo and Juliet. Something i connected to is when you said, “And I should be able to just be me, Without the fear of a gun”. This connected to me bec…[Read more]
I liked how you bring up a true and very real problem. Familys do cause stress. which can reflect onto people and their kids. I really like how you used the metaphor,“Pain can be a scorpion wanting to poison your mind.” I found this really interesting because when parents fight they are hurting their kids and that can be like poi…[Read more]
I liked how you used words in Spanish to express fear. With that fear it shapes your whole poem. I also like how you make nice how you used questions in your poem to make it clear people that people are confused. This also shows me that there are multiple personalities in fear. Overall your poem is moving and i hope you keep…[Read more]
I enjoyed how you express how you see homelessness in Oakland. I thought this was a strong topic to talk about because all around Oakland and many other places lots of people are facing homelessness. Something that you could do better on is rhyming your poem or is repeating a word to make it flow clearly. But overall I like…[Read more]
Hi I’m Christina a 9th grader at Life Academy my poem is how i see Shakespeare’s Romeo and Juliet. This is in the perspective of Love, sadness, but having someone there for you. Hope you enjoy leave comments :
I like how you included metaphors and similes is your poem I think it shows how you decided to meet all the requirements. I also like how when you said, “Hate brings me to faith but faith brought me to you” I liked this because it showed a lot about emotions and I just appreciate how you explicitly wrote it. I also like who you phrase also your words when trying put all the words together. I really like how you put everything together.
Dear Christina, you poem is really nice a really like the title because I thought you was going to write how love is really cute because you tittle name is sunshine but at the end it finish with not being happy ending about love. So theres it comes the similes and metaphors you really did a good job because its interesting and it leaves you like on trying to know more. -Maria
Great job on your poem about love I liked the part where you said “my muscles keep me strong when i’m low” that line shows that your strong enough to not go down. Another thing that I liked was when you did a simile on the kline “Happy is where I see your face face like an angel that can’t leave me.An angel like a guardian of my heart”. I think that this was good smile because it showed how they brought you happiness.
I am very proud of you! Thank you for sharing your powerful poem. One sentence you wrote that stands out to me is was when your wrote “Your face like an angel that can’t leave me
An angel like a guardian of my heart . I think this is very appealing because I like how you compared their faces with an angle. Another sentence that I liked was ¨ My muscles to keep me strong when I’m low¨. This stood out because it shows what you feel at times and I’m sure there’s a lot people who can connect. Overall, I really like the rhyme that your poem had over each other! Thanks for your poem. I look forward to seeing what you write next, because you’re a great poet. Hope seeing wonderful poems!
your box was very well detailed with pictures of yourself when you were younger and pictures with your family. I also loved how you used the mexican flag to show your pride of your country it is really moving because of all the drama that is going on you still care about your home even though you are here. I also…[Read more]
I am fascinated by your box because you used a big Mexican flag to represent your home country. I also like that you used an American flag on the other side of your box, even tho its small it shows were you live and were you life started. In addition I like how you put the oakland tree in your box because it…[Read more]
The inside of the box represents me because it has images on the back wall of me and family/friends. These represent me because I care and love my family and friends deeply. I also added a campsite in my box
I like your shadow box because it shows on your little essay that you like nature, and exploring the world. And I can see that you have a dream school and that is a goal you would like to meet some day for you can be a zoologist or vetnerania.
I really enjoyed seeing all the details and objects that you incorporated on your box. Your box clearly shows who you are as a person and what you like. I think that you did a very great job with all the colors and details on your box. God job on your project it was honestly really beautiful!
I love your shadow box! It looks so creative and original. A part of your paragraph that I like is where you talk about being really close to family and friends, and how you care about them. Something that stood out to me is where you talk about liking camping and being away technology ( I don’t think I can do that). Another one that stood out is wanting to be in UC Davis! I find it really nice how you want to study about animals, and become a veterinarian. Something I want to point out is the girl power I think is super cool to point out, I totally agree with you. I also agree with you on thesterepytpes and being latina. Keep it up, hope seeing more of your hard work!
I am fascinated with your shadow box, like how you used a statue of Guadalupe in your piece and add pictures of yourself. When I see your Guadalupe statue and your pictures around it; it makes me feel like she is protecting you. In addition I like how you used the american and Mexican flag it shows me that you a you…[Read more]
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We merged several earlier blogging projects. We have found that there are many advantages to bringing students together in one site that lives beyond any particular class. It's easier for individual students to read and write about their own passions, to connect with other students, comment on each other's work, and create multimedia posts for each other. Further, it's been exciting for us to pool our knowledge about curriculum, connected learning, and digital literacies.
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