I would like to thank you for reading my work. I like how you said how good my work sounded and how I proved my point. I really thought this was a good topic because school lunch is a problem is lots of places not just Oakland. But thanks again for reading my work I really appreciate you reading it.
I agree with your argument because it is well written. I especially agree with the fact that the lunch is getting better but it needs more improvements. You express this fact well by including evidence from students, the people in the cafeteria, and from articles. I also agree with your argument that if school lunches were healthier and better, students would perform better at school. This was an important idea to include because many people think having healthy food is necessary only because people get hungry. But the truth is that there’s a bigger picture which you were able to show.
Good job on your blog!
I agree with this post by what it has to say about eating healthy because it’s a good thing with your letter ¨ Is School Lunch a problem¨ because it really gets to the point and because i think school meal are bad.
One sentence you wrote that stands out to me is ¨why does food need to be good?¨ I think this is Stunning because you may be opened peopleś life with this story. Because this made me feel like there is more people that know what im talking about.
Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next, because your a great writer. And because you know what your doing. This is one of my best one for know. And what will bring me back to this is the fact the fact that you knew how to write it.
I agree with your post, “Is school lunch a problem?” because I can relate to many of the points you made. Such as how students start ro bring their own food after having a bad experience with the food taste or getting sick from it.
One sentence that stood out to me was “The fact that the lack of experience is extraordinary shows that they know what is good for students that are in school and since they are not focusing on making money t this is a program that all of the schools should have because it also helps the students that come from low-income families they don’t pay usually for their food so this also show the equity on how low-income students get the same chances as other on getting healthy and good food to get through their academic day¨ I think this is beneficial because a majority of the students here come from low income family and can not afford to buy lunch daily. Because of this this the bad tasting food causes kids to go hungry and get distracted by it during class.
Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next because it was something I know a majority of all students can relate to it. Also because you wrote a good structured essay that flowed well.
I really like how you expressed you poem here it really shows what people might think when they think about suicide. It really shows that you gave thought onto this common problem that is out there. I like when you said that “people commit suicides because of love and because of depression” it shows how strong your poem is some par…[Read more]
I really appreciate the confidence you had to share this personal story to the class i know it must be hard for you to have your dad lost every day. This shows that you are strong by sharing this not only to our class but to the public as well. Thanks for sharing this with us hope we get more poems from you soon!
I like your poem it’s strong it’s simple and gets to the main point that “growing up wasn’t always easy” your poem was strong i liked when you said “There are bullets,
BANG! BANG! BANG!
Bullets that dance through the air
And hit innocents”
This was really strong because it’s true we see and hear innocent people get murdered by mean…[Read more]
Chris, this poem shows very literally the negativity of violence, and how it affects others. I found it very interesting how you mentioned that violence is started by people who are hurt. I can tell the words you wrote are what you truly feel about violence, and how we don’t know how to end it, but we know its a toxic chain reaction that needs to stop.
I really like how your poem explained what is violence and you gave your perpective and your side of the story on violence. Something that you said that stood out to me is ”Violence creates death” because then you explain on why that is true because people are dying everyday. I also really admire how you where repartive in your poem like saying “we” “we” “we” because you are saying like we as in all. Thank you for writing a wonderful poem. I look forward to seeing what poems you write next.
Your poem is really good. I honestly like your poem I like how you chose the topic violence. But from all the things that happened in Romeo and Juliet what made you choose violence? I think you should have explained why you choose violence in your description but overall your poem was really good.
Sincerely, Bryan Moreno
I like your box because it really shows who you identify yourself as. This is important because this is who you are and you clearly demonstrate that here. Also, i like how you put the red on the outside of your box.
Hi Chris my name is robert an i am a Fremont HS student and i really like your shadow box because i like cars too. plus i like the way you made your box by putting fabric and paper together.also i love the color blue
I really like the way you have you box and how you show yourself about you being Mexican American. I really think that your car was a very strong object because you explain what you do in car and most people see Mexican like people that would do illegal things when driving but what your wrote about yourself shows that those comments…[Read more]
You should know who I am because you have known me since 6th grade But the point of his is that I really like your shadow box because I remember seeing you draw your drawing. Also, that proves that your a very hard worker in school because if you take long on a drawing you take long on your work too this shows who you really are. I…[Read more]
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