• Dear Oscar,
    Thank you for taking your time to read and appreciate my poem. It means a lot that you went through the effort to write such a thoughtful response. Initially, I was worried that my poem was unclear, but I am happy to hear that you completely understood my poems messages. I was wondering if your class also posted poems on youth voices,…[Read more]

  • (Curly’s Wife)Everyday I watch men workBehind the scenes I observeI examine their movementAnd watch them make conversationEvery dayDrowning in my own thoughtsNot permitted to say a wordItching to say s

    • Dear Chiara
      I am very impressed by your poem, “I’d Still Be Breathing,” because you really showed how she feels lonely and how sexism really affects her in a negative way. This poes really showed me how sexism is a big problem in the world and how we need to address it. To me the main message of your poem is how she feels lonely and affected by sexism which causes her great sadness. I know this because when you said “Drowning in my own thoughts Not permitted to say a word Itching to say something But I sit in silence I’m full of words I wish to speak” this shows me that she feels silenced and can’t speak out about how she feels. One line that stands out for me is, “I know their air tastes best pure And uninvaded by my opinion” I think this line is amazing because it shows how sexism affects her when she tries to speak out and shows how she silenced because of who she is. Also I love how you said that there air taste best pure to show and emphasize how her opinion isn’t taken into consideration. I really liked how you used the literary device of metaphor when you said “I never meant for my words to clash with their closed minded ideals”. I think this line is really powerful because I love how you used metaphors by saying my words clashed with their closed minded ideals. This line is really showing me how her opinion and words aren’t important to people which isn’t right. Your poem reminds me of a poem that I once read that was talking about how sexism causes women to feel as if silenced and oppressed by those who are in power .Your poem sends an important message about sexism because you talk about how she feels silences and how her opinion doesn’t matter. Thanks for your poem. I look forward to seeing what you make next. You are great poem and you are a great poet.

      • Dear Oscar,
        Thank you for taking your time to read and appreciate my poem. It means a lot that you went through the effort to write such a thoughtful response. Initially, I was worried that my poem was unclear, but I am happy to hear that you completely understood my poems messages. I was wondering if your class also posted poems on youth voices, if you did, could you please reply with a link to your poem? I’d like to read it and leave a comment.

  • Chiara posted a new activity comment 9 months, 2 weeks ago

    hey

  • Chiara became a registered member 12 months ago

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