Hey, I agree that no matter how a person talks, acts, and dresses, we should respect them as Americans (assuming they address themselves as Americans). The belief that hard work always pays off is usually true as well. I believe you can extend some of the points...

I enjoy how you put multiple sources and poems into your poem and summarizing them while relating them to individuality. I really enjoy the point you made, but I do believe you can continue to build off your point and extend your paragraph as well.

FIrst, I would like to address that this passage had a lot of context in it, good job. I also like the fact that you incorporated a quote from a book in it, showing your appreciation to the rights and life you have now. I definitely...

Hey Clara, I enjoy the way you started with a strong opening statement by offering the proper definition of the "death penalty", and thus, starting the discussion. Although I do appreciate the showcasing of both perspectives of the story, I do believe you should dive deeper into one...