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    I laugh and I smile, for the joy I feel,

    I want others to experience and savor it as much as I do.

    When the spring air comes with the clouds,

    That is were my happiness comes from.

     

    When the bees buzz, the

    Song of Myself (Song of Myself by Walt Whitman)

    I laugh and I smile, for the joy I feel, I want others to experience and savor it as much as I do. When the spring air comes with the clouds, That is were my happiness comes from.   When the bees buzz,...

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    • Jaden,
      this was a very good and well written poem. I really enjoyed the part when you mentioned the paint on your clothes and the ink on your hands/skin. This was very beautiful and I could really hear your voice as I read this poem. Great job!

    • Jaden,

      This was absolutely beautiful. I loved the pictures you painted about life in the country. I felt like I could actually see everything you were describing. You did an amazing job!

    • Jaden,
      While reading this poem, I thought that I was reading Whitman himself. You wrote so eloquently and did a truly fantastic job of imitating the style of the original poem. I thought you might like to have a go at doing your own take on another one of his poems, so here is a link https://www.poets.org/poetsorg/poems/45619 to a number of fantastic poems.
      Thanks so much for your poetry!
      -Tony

    • I completely understood the meaning you had when reading this – it was very well done. It’s so relatable (I also love the spring and summertime), and the imagery is fantastic; I can truly experience the nature with you. Even though I am not personally religious, I still felt an incredible peace at the conclusion of your writing.

    • Jaden,
      Your poem was amazing! Your use of vivid imagery was well done. I had a clear picture of everything that you were talking about in my head. You also did a great job on telling me how much you love nature through your poem. It is obvious to me that someone couldn’t paint that vivid of an image unless they were very well acquainted with the outdoors.

    • Jaden,
      This was such a beautiful poem. I really like what your class/ school is doing with the songs about yourself. I enjoyed how you talked about your big family and how it has shaped who you are as a person. Great post!

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