Hey Ceasar!
This is really cool! I didn’t now you could attach audio to a post. Anyways, I thought you did a really good job. As I looked at the places you would pause I thought that it sounded awkward, but when you read them out loud they sounded very natural and dramatic. I would say to annunciate a bit better. Here is a video that I think is a good example:

Is there only negative effects with teenagers using social media or is it adults as well? why is it a problem today? You have a very good argument. Your thesis is also very clear. Is there certain social media’s where the negative effects happen the most. There is also a few typos but you guys should be fine just proof read it over again. Overall this is a good introduction paragraph to begin with.

Good start. How could you clarify your plans for the group in the image? Might you need to incorporate more text or more visual details to help viewers understand the problem and solution?

Great idea, and sounds like it could be well executed. Maybe try to talk about preventing that kind of talk on social media before it happens. Raise awareness on the effects your words can have, and will have, on social media.

I think this is a great start for you. I think this is a topic we all need to talk about and not shy away from.

This is truly a fantastic idea. My school has been recently affected by a classmate who committed suicide. The importance for programs like this to help kids suffering from depression or bullying leaves me speechless. The only way to make something like this work however, would be to have a really cool teacher that is very relate-able and easy to trust.

Awesome! I believe that this solution will have lots of good benefits for all schools and districts. Your image sends a strong message about social media being the reason why teenagers consider suicide as the only alternative.

Your argument is very clear and you have a good thesis to start it off. When reading your work I just wanted to know is it all social media that you are talking about or just a certain one? Not only kids use the internet is a negative way because adults also have a negative effect on social media. With your solution can you talk more about “Support groups” and how having them will help out teens.

Providing an after school program is a great solution for students to talk it all out and would feel less pressured that way. This would be a great help for them.

This is good! but there are some errors that needs to be revised. but it seems like your solution was used before in some other issue prototype but minor nothing big. Your artwork is cool Powerful and it says a lot in so many words.

I think this is a great start. I would focus on how to get the plans off of the paper and into action to better the community. I also really like your plan of preventing bullying before it happens instead of waiting .

I think this is a great idea. A friend of mine started a group like this and it turned out to be a great way for people to openly talk about the difficult things they are experiencing in their lives. It was a safe place which made everyone know they wouldn’t be judged but that they would receive the listening ear they needed. This is such a healthy way to overcome this issue we all face today.