• What your project was about?

    My project was about diabetes and the costs of the medication. Diabetes is a broad topic and there’s a lot to it, and we tried to mention a lot of it such as Type 1 diabetes, T

  • Calvin commented on the post, Open Your Eyes 1 month, 3 weeks ago

    Dear Piper, I am fascinated by your poem. To me, the main message of your poem is all the bad things that are happening right now and how we should realize it. I think this because you pointed out a lot of events that has happened recently. I like how you use the literary device of anaphora with “Open your eyes”. Using that literary device made me…[Read more]

  • Calvin commented on the post, Why Not? 1 month, 3 weeks ago

    Dear Naveen, I think that you prove a really good point in your poem, “Why Not?”. It is true and it shows how the gaming industry makes a lot of their money. One line that stands out is “Who has the cooler looking outfit’s”. This quote shows an important message because the in-game items are so hyped up that if you don’t have it, you wouldn’t fit…[Read more]

  • Calvin commented on the post, Why Not? 1 month, 3 weeks ago

    Dear Naveen, I think that you prove a really good point in your poem, “Why Not?”. It is true and it shows how the gaming industry makes a lot of their money. One line that stands out is “Who has the cooler looking outfit’s”. This quote shows an important message because the in-game items are so hyped up that if you don’t have it, you wouldn’t fit…[Read more]

  • Thank you for taking the time to read my blog. I like your idea of adding the gentrifier perspective because I believe that there is some good in gentrification as well, I only wrote about it’s negative effects on Oakland. What do you think are some ways that gentrification can help? I hope to hear back from you soon. Thank you!

  • Calvin commented on the post, Poem 3 months, 3 weeks ago

    Dear Judith,
    I like the way you interpreted my poem! I never really saw it that way. ” It is also shows how they are caused by what the heart wants and impacts how the mind thinks.” Thank you for taking the time to read my writing!

  • Calvin commented on the post, Poem 3 months, 3 weeks ago

    Dear Naveen,
    Thank you for taking the time to read my writing. Can you elaborate on which part of my poem reminds you of friendships? I look forward to hearing back!

  • Thank you so much for taking the time to read my blog. I’m glad I enlightened you about gentrification, especially the street names, because the little things matter.

  • Dear Daniel, I love the topic of your blog. I think these ideas to stop and prevent violence are really smart. I totally think law enforcement should bond with the community. One question I have is that did this project actually lower gun violence percentages? And what other steps can we take to prevent gun violence inside our own community…[Read more]

  • Hey Kanika, I really like the topic you chose to talk about. I agree with a lot of the points you made, especially the one that mentions that a lot of single parent households can’t really afford to take care of their kids and pay off rent at the same time. One question that I have is what do you mean by “New community members are increasing the…[Read more]

  • Calvin Dao

    Humanities 9

    Ms. Portugal

    12/21/18

     

    Oakland is becoming Unrecognizable because of Gentrification

    Recently Oakland has been changing  in terms of new buildings and demographically with new p

    • Dear Calvin,
      I really enjoyed reading your blog because your argument was clear. I agree with what you said about how Oakland’s diversity represents its history. That was extremely well written and hella true. Another part I really liked was your ending where you wrote, “The gentrifiers are causing people to be evicted, rent prices to become astronomical and street names changing, disregarding our history and our past”. I think it was cool that you mentioned street names because personally, I’ve never associated street names with gentrification. Your blog was both enlightening and well written.
      Good job!

    • Thank you so much for taking the time to read my blog. I’m glad I enlightened you about gentrification, especially the street names, because the little things matter.

    • Thank you for taking the time to read my blog. I like your idea of adding the gentrifier perspective because I believe that there is some good in gentrification as well, I only wrote about it’s negative effects on Oakland. What do you think are some ways that gentrification can help? I hope to hear back from you soon. Thank you!

    • Calvin,

      You have written an excellent post about the rise of housing in Oakland. “Oakland is becoming unrecognizable” stood out to me because San Jose, where I reside has the exact housing trouble. As a college student, living with such a high rent is a serious struggle, considering that rent is only one of the many things I have to pay for monthly. With the addition of phone bills, electricity bills, internet bills, groceries, an unreasonably high rent is the cherry on top of the sundae of stress I face. I think your use of a personal interview brought a personal touch to your post, adding that touch of human reality to the housing crisis faced by many in the Bay area. Your sentence,”These gentrifiers are trying to change the names from something meaningful to something new just so other people of higher class stray away from the idea that the area is dangerous and it is now a new safer area to live in” stuck with me after reading your post because the fact that meaningful town history is being erased for advertising purpose is heartbreaking.

      Great work Calvin!

  • Dear Joseph,
    Your poem was too real. I really like how you thought about it a lot and wrote down a bunch of your ideas, especially the questions. I also find it interesting that you associated hate to gun violence. War and conflict has caused too many casualties. My favorite line was “Apparently the strength of hate is unconditional” because it…[Read more]

  • Dear Judith, I think your poem is really interesting because it’s crazy to think that people have had to go through these experiences. I really like how you included a lot of metaphors into your poem as well, it’s really creative and meaningful. My favorite line was “Trying to get ahold of the world
    That was taken from your hands
    By hateful eyes,”…[Read more]

  • Dear Daniel, your poem is amazing! One line that stood out to me was where you talked about how hate is like a storm because it causes a lot of damage. I really agree with this line. Good job connecting it to the 2 families fighting in Romeo and Juliet. Thank you so much for sharing your poem!

  • Calvin commented on the post, My Shadow Box 5 months, 3 weeks ago

    Dear Wendy,
    Your shadow box theme is really nice and I love how you included a lot of pictures of memories you’ve had with your friends and family. It’s really cool and creative how you kind of applied dominant and counter narratives to your black roses thing as well, how people see it as a depressing color but to you it’s a really pretty color.…[Read more]

  • Calvin commented on the post, My Shadow box 5 months, 3 weeks ago

    Dear Kenya,
    I really like the way you decorated your shadowbox. I really liked how you gave examples of your dominant and counter narratives. What did the rest of your artist statement say by the way? Good job staying strong fighting against these dominant narratives ! Have you gotten any awards from competitive swimming? I would love to hear…[Read more]

  • Calvin commented on the post, What I see 5 months, 3 weeks ago

    Dear Kanika, I really like the topic of your poem. It’s really prominent in this area. It’s clear from your poem that violence can cause a lot of destruction and sadness. You did a good job connecting Romeo and Juliet to things that are happening right now! Where else do you think you can apply that to? When you talked about losing someone to a…[Read more]

  • Calvin wrote a new post, Poem 5 months, 4 weeks ago

    Emotions control us like puppets

    I laid limp, coldness on my face

    Strings were tied from a unique place

    Pulled on one and watched me stand

    Pulled on the other and watched me dance

     

    Pull too harshly and

    • Dear Calvin
      Thank you for sharing your poetry and having the courage to allow hundreds of people to read it. Your poem reminded me of how people can create or destroy friendships depending on their mood. Once I read what this poem represented the whole poem came together, and it was truly great. Good job!

      • Dear Naveen,
        Thank you for taking the time to read my writing. Can you elaborate on which part of my poem reminds you of friendships? I look forward to hearing back!

    • Dear Calvin,
      I love your poem! It’s simple but yet says so much in the words you chose to use. You chose an interesting topic and the way you chose to describe it, with the metaphor of the strings and marionettes, is smart and amazing. It is clear how emotions taking control of actions connects to Romeo and Juliet. You took a cool interpretation of it. My favorite line of your poem is
      “Aren’t visible like silk or lace
      Yet they bind my body and my mind
      And in my heart is where they hide”
      because it shows the impact of emotions, even when they aren’t visible. It is also shows how they are caused by what the heart wants and impacts how the mind thinks. You’re the coolest!
      Thanks for sharing your poem!

      • Dear Judith,
        I like the way you interpreted my poem! I never really saw it that way. ” It is also shows how they are caused by what the heart wants and impacts how the mind thinks.” Thank you for taking the time to read my writing!

  • Calvin commented on the post, My shadow box 7 months, 2 weeks ago

    Dear Jai’kari, your shadowbox interests me. One sentence you wrote that stands out for me was when you wrote that you’re not really athletic but that doesn’t make you less of a man. It stands out to me because it’s true that you don’t have to be athletic to be a man. I agree with it a lot.

  • Hey Kanika. I’m impressed by your shadowbox. One part that stood out to me was when you were talking about the stereotypes about yourself. I agree with you a lot because those stereotypes are not true and they put down a lot of people. One piece of feedback I have for you is to spellcheck and re – read your work, but other than that your writing…[Read more]

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