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    Jee commented on the post, Plasticy Waters

    Hey Naomi,
    As I read your article I came to gain a new perspective of doing a research. On the beginning I also thought my research was going to be pretty straightforward. Later, however, I found the issue to be more complex than I thought it would be. So I am currently trying to figure out what I have now.
    I guess it’s hard in both ways to make…Read More

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    I am very confident with the resources I have so far. I have enough pieces of information from credible organizations, such as CNN or BBC. The main idea of the research is to reveal the “secrets” of chocolate: som

    Chocolate research and how it is going on

    I am very confident with the resources I have so far. I have enough pieces of information from credible organizations, such as CNN or BBC. The main idea of the research is to reveal the “secrets” of chocolate: some...

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    • I have always wondered why chocolate tastes so good and it’s liked by so many. I’m curious as to what your research and findings will uncover about the mystery of chocolate. I suggest researching about the different kinds of chocolate-this may help you to better organize your findings and put the pieces together.

    • I think that you understand the path your paper is heading in and what it is going to take to get you there. You know how to write a research paper and it’s good that you are questioning your thesis because that means that you genuinely care about this paper and this topic. I think that whatever route you choose to take concerning the issues or benefits of chocolate will result in an excellent paper.

    • Jee,
      I think this is a really good idea to take a break from doing a paper to put into words how you feel about a project, and put your stream of consciousness into words. I think this is very productive and it seems to have helped you to clarify where you want to take your research project and what you really want to focus on. I’m going to try and use this kind of technique sometime. Thanks for sharing!

    • I think that this has the potential to be a very good topic. You didn’t present any information about your topic. I was a little confused as to what your post was about, because you talked about your paper but didn’t really explain what you needed help on. You did ask if your thesis was strong enough but you didn’t state your thesis.

    • I think that to write an effective essay you have to first find out what you are trying to communicate to your audience. You discussed many different parts of chocolate and the process behind it, but you need to focus on the one area you want to talk about. This could be ethical concerns of making it, health concerns or whatever else strikes your fancy. One you have a clear thesis you will have a good essay.

    • I think this is great. It is a very unique topic and I was very intrigued. I am no curious what is behind the secrets of chocolate.

    • This is a very interesting topic and I understand how not incorporating bias must be difficult. I would possibly suggest using statistics and data as much as possible, rather than articles written by people who inflict bias no matter what. I would like to see where this topic takes you!! Good luck and maybe your could find a way to incorporate your own testing of different chocolates (that way you get to eat chocolate:) ).

    • Jee, interesting article. It is hard for me to distinguish your thoughts in this post, but I guess that might be the point. I think your thoughts are very jumbled and confusing and yes, indeed, it is important to find a thesis. Your opening paragraph was very confusing and this entire post was all over the place. If using this article to write your thoughts down I think it was great. If you were trying to update a reader on your thesis I think you could have used more clarity and perhaps better sentence structure to convey your idea better. Otherwise, I love the idea that you are researching chocolate and all different types of situations of chocolate.

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    I always loved chocolate – and it is famous for it’s high calories. I really didn’t care much about what high calories from sugar meant but not it is very clear for me. So I was going to do a study about chocolate

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    I always loved chocolate - and it is famous for it's high calories. I really didn't care much about what high calories from sugar meant but not it is very clear for me. So I was going to do...

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    Jee commented on the post, Becoming Beautiful

    Hi Tevy,
    I strongly agree with your argument. Though people care a lot about their out looks, nothing can win over the beauty of personality. The outer beauty differs by culture and region. But everyone like people who are kind and nice.
    Your persuasion was very powerful and I truly believe that this piece of argument will help more people to…Read More

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    If you have been interested in diet, it is likely that you may have heard of Denmark Diet. The meals of the diet consists of grapefruit, bread, eggs, some meat, vegetable salad and coffee. The plans vary d

    Want to diet? Choose this diet!

        If you have been interested in diet, it is likely that you may have heard of Denmark Diet. The meals of the diet consists of grapefruit, bread, eggs, some meat, vegetable salad and coffee. The plans vary depending on...

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