Dear, Brian

I am amazed by your blog “Oakland Violence” because it talks about real things in Oakland. You also mention real stories for example the one about Mario and that really adds to your blog because its a perspective that like they have first hand experience in the things that go on in Oakland.

One sentence that you wrote that stands out for me is : “Another way to get rid of violence because of gangs is having more programs in schools. For example, it can be a job in the library, it can be swimming classes, also it can be a football team. Or, a place where the young people can be distracted and they don’t have to be in the streets involved in gangs and doing bad things.” This stood out for me because you are giving great examples and if someone who can create a change read this they can make it happen.

Another sentence that I liked was “In conclusion, to decrease the violence in Oakland that are caused by gangs and fights for young people Oakland needs more programs and police in parks. Let’s make the change for a better Oakland.” This stood out for me because its at the end and it’s like very inspiring and it’s a great way to end it off.

Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next , because your writing is good and very interesting and to be honest me personally I really like it.Also for the reason that you use real examples and different perspectives.

Dear Brian,

I am surprised by what you had said about “Oakland Violence” because you don’t really see articles that have guns and schools involved because some people don’t really know that the outcome of that is dangerous. You try to come up with ideas to make the school a better environment.

One sentence that you wrote that stands out for me is “To decrease the fights at schools the district can create a program like the program LMB “Latin Man and Boys” and “Joven Noble.” These programs involve young boys and they receive help from a mentor that is always there for them. They learn about where they come from and they are always together helping each other like if they were brothers”. This sentence stood out to me the most because me myself, I have taken the class Joven Noble and it teaches you the steps into becoming a young man and it won’t happen over night, it’s a journey to go through these steps.

Thank you for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next, because the fact that you took your time and found statistics to find how much violence there was in Oakland says a lot about the kids there and how it’s a very dangerous environment. I really want to read what you have next, great job.

Jesus

Dear Brian :
I agree with a lot of what your article, “Oakland Violence” says, because… it shows us the harsh realities that some cities in America endure. I also think our cities should actively attempt to give these troubled people a way out of the life or violence.
One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is: “Another way to get rid of violence because of gangs is having more programs in schools. For example, it can be a job in the library, it can be swimming classes, also it can be a football team.” I think this is a great suggestion because… it should lessen the amount of kids that end up in gangs.
Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next, because… I find these types of subjects really interesting. I also like that you used a person you knew in your life that had these sorts of experiences.
Miguel

Brian,

This piece is very informative. Great job providing specific examples and stories to showcase solutions to Oakland violence. I love the idea of young gang members finding jobs and joining sports teams to keep them off the streets. In addition, programs like LMB and Joven Noble seem very successful. Here is a link to the website of Father Gregory Boyle, a catholic priest, who has founded an organization to help gang members lead good lives.

Father Greg, Founder

Brian, I thought your article posed a lot of great ideas that definitely need to be heard. I thought your stories that included first hand experience with Oakland were fascinating. I enjoyed how you tried to make schools safer and propose new ideas that may serve as a compromise to both sides of gun control. I thought your suggestion for kids to become more involved in after school activities was very interesting. Here is an article you might like https://youth.gov/feature-article/gang-prevention-overview-research-and-programs . It discusses why kids join gangs and how to prevent that from happening. Let me know what you think! Do you think kids join gangs because of peer pressure.

Brian, thanks for sharing. I think as a whole in the U.S. we need to get rid of gun violence as quick as possible to make our country a better place.

Dear Brian,

Thank you for sharing your work. My name is Jose Valencia and I am a student at Fremont High School.
Something I liked about your work was that I like the way you explained your objects and I like the objects you put on your shadow box. Keep up that good work. Please feel free to comment on my work in the future.
Thank You!