Brian,
I agree with you that Trump was very offensive with many things that he said, and its true he needs to watch what he says to the people he will be leading. Many people are furious about these outcomes because of the things he has said and the ways he has deeply offended many members of many groups in America. Now, its time for him to figure things out and start being professional.
This writing has such a solid based idea but the gravity that it could’ve had gets lost in the grammar, sentence structure etc. You could use more sources and valid evidence to support your reasoning for what line Trump had said and why/ how they offended certain groups. People enjoy reading articles that have good evidence. To make this post stronger you should consider adding quotes and real reactions from certain people around america.
Again, I enjoyed the idea that this was built on but in order to make it stronger, consider the changes that I have suggested. It’s always great when you can take an issue such as this and turn it into a motivational work. Good Job!