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Dear Kayla,
I am surprise and sad about your blog “Why”, because this blog can be touching for women that got raped and they maintain their silents. One sentence that stood out for me was, “Secondly, women need to remember to speak out about their stories because so many are not addressed. When they speak out about their stories it would help…Read More
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Ashley commented on the post, Cultural Celebrations In Oakland
Dear Imelda,
I am proud of your work about “Cultural Celebrations in Oakland”, because you explain how these celebrations help out the community be together as one. One sentence you wrote that stands out to me is , “Oakland Celebrations are so special because everyone is welcomed and they can learn about each other”. I agree with you when yo…Read More
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Let’s Create a Change Towards the OUSD District
Does the OUSD district give Oakland high school students an advantage or disadvantage? When the topic of OUSD owning millions of money can be a disad
Read MoreLet’s Create a Change Towards the OUSD District Does the OUSD district give Oakland high school students an advantage or disadvantage? When the topic of OUSD owning millions of money can be a disadvantage or a advantage towards students. In...
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Thank you so much for reading my blog. I wanted to address what you said when , “Students will have more potential to be more focus and not feeling confused during class”. I was wondering if you had some problems focusing in class because you don’t eat at school?
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Hey Abby,
Thanks for reading my blog :). One of your question was asking what I can do to change the problems from my school district. Something I can try to do in the future is to talk to teachers and students about what they think about the lunch they produce at school. With their opinion we can try to create a change towards having more appetizing food. I have some questions for you : “Did you like the school lunch that the district provide to students? And If you don’t, “Would you go back and change the lunch food? And if you did , “Does eating in school help you concentrate in your classes?”
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Ashley commented on the post, love and war by matthew
Dear Matthew,
I am proud about your poem , “Love and War”, because you connect to the story about Romeo and Juliet and create it about something that happens in Oakland. I really liked how you explain where the non- privileged people live and where the “privilege people” live in Oakland. Something that I like about your poem was that you talked…Read More -
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My poem talks about how it connects to Romeo and Juliet and we had to make connections to 2018. I ended up writing about love and violence. My poem talks about how love can be harsh and good. My poem talks a
Read MoreMy poem talks about how it connects to Romeo and Juliet and we had to make connections to 2018. I ended up writing about love and violence. My poem talks about how love can be harsh and good. My...
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Ashley,
You did a great job with your poem it really stood out to me because I can see the connection to Romeo and Juliet. I really like the line where you said “But “money” is not the definition of love,” this stood out to me because a lot of people will use others for their advantage instead of actually wanting to be with them. One suggestion I would make is to watch out for your capitalization. Other than this I think your poem is really strong and you are an amazing writer good job.
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Hello Ashley,
I really enjoyed reading you poem because it really does connect to Romeo and Juliet. I love the line where you said “follow your heart and ambitions with the person you truly love”, the reason for this is because I believe its important to follow you heart towards anything you love especially with the person you truly love. Other than that, your poem is beautifully wrote out, great job.
Thank you,
Destinee Garcia
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Ashley,
I was really amazed with your writing specially the topics you chose to talk about because a change should be made and you are taking a step towards making people talk about it. One sentence you write that really stood out to me was probably when you said “Students will have more potential to be more focus and not feeling confused during class.” or also when you explained that a lot of money was being wasted either way because kids don’t eat the food. I think your blog was incredible good job:). Thanks for writing I look forward to seeing what you write next because you are an amazing writer and your poem last time was really good.
-Wendy