•    Family, love,and loyalty are important to me. I was born in Lincoln Hospital, Bronx,NY. I lived on 179th St. and Park Avenue with my grandmother, my grandfather and my dad. My grandfather was the building su

    • Abby replied 1 month ago

      Your story about your upbringing is very unique. I really like how you capitalize on your diversity and how your experiences have shaped you as a person. However, I would suggest transition between the second and the third paragraph, because I was unclear about how it connects to the rest of your story. I think you should also go into more detail regarding your hopes and dreams for the future.

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