• Dear Ariel,
    One thing I loved about your essay is how you elaborate on even the small things to help us have a bigger understanding of it.

  • Ariel Liz

    Spring 2019

    Kiran

    The Power Of Poetry

    Gateway Draft

    My poem is “Immigrants In Our Own Land” by Jimmy Santiago Baca.This poem is mostly about the struggles and challenges of having to mov

    • Dear Ariel,
      One thing that I liked about your analysis is that your question was a question that some people like me wonder as well. You chose this question for the right poem. This poem is talking about how someone left their family for a better life which answers this question.

  • I really like how in depth you went into even in the smallest lines.For example the line “How should I accept nature”.

  • The biggest personal life question for me is how do people cope with this mentally having to leave their home and having to work in a place you have never been in before.This poem doesn’t answer my personal

    • Dear Ariel:

      I am impressed with your post, “Immigrants in our own land,” because this situation is very common. The mexicans want a place where they can live better where the have opportunities. When the come to U.S most of the people come to work to take their family forward.

      One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is: “he biggest personal life question for me is how do people cope with this mentally having to leave their home and having to work in a place you have never been in before.” I think this is so real because people think and feel that U.S is a place that have a better place where the people can feel happy.

      Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next, because this themes are so important for all of us because we need to understand that U.S is not the only place where you can have a good future. Mexico is also a good place there are opportunities there too. We can be safe and happy if we want.

  • Thanks for this comment I really like the fact that im not the only person that has had an ecounter with gangs

  • Ariel commented on the post, Karla's Journey 5 months, 1 week ago

    Dear Karla,
    I am empathetic about living with a single parent.One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is “My life went in the other direction once my dad left”.I feel sorry that he did that to you to be very honest I wish my dad left.But for you but i’m guessing you didn’t want that to happen in your case.Thanks for your writing.I look…[Read more]

  • My name is Ariel Liz.Im latino to be specific im dominican 100 percent. A lot of people think of the little mermaid when they hear my name.They also think this because of my height.I was born in New York City to

    • Dear Ariel,

      I am interested in your interest in guitar because I’m a guitar player myself. Your post shows a picture of guitar but you only talk about it in only one paragraph, “A guitar player from DR,” is a weird title because it seems like you played only in school, but based on your title it seems like you have been playing guitar since you lived in DR.

      One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is: “Which means that instead of just playing with your thumb I can play with all 5 of my fingers.” I think this is weird because This is either a mistake or you play it in a very unique, weird way. Usually, when you play fingerstyle guitar you only use your thumb, index and middle finger, but you can use your ring if you want, not recommended

      Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next because I like seeing other musicians continue on a journey of music.

    • I loved how you mentioned all of the good and bad in your life. It really struck me when you talked about gang violence and your incident with a gang. I can’t even imagine how i’d feel if that happened to me. I would also like to say how sorry i am for your losses and I can’t even get the slightest idea on how i’d react if that happened to me. It was also nice to see how you talked about the things that make you happy in life and how much you’ve improved on them.

    • Dear Ariel,

      I’m happy to hear you love playing guitar because I’m the same way, sometimes i feel like all i want to do is play guitar for the rest of my life. It’s cool that you’re very straightforward about your academics, it shows you have a lot of determination when it comes down to what you care about/are invested in.

      A sentence that stood out to me was “they [gangs] have threatened me before. This is a real turning point in my life because for the first time I could actually see what the world is like.” this is interesting, because this experience made you see things more clear about the world we live in, how people are not always friendly and you will encounter people who are trying to hurt you.

      thank you for telling us about yourself. Keep playing guitar and have fun with it.

      • Thanks for this comment I really like the fact that im not the only person that has had an ecounter with gangs

  • Ariel commented on the post, Brother 6 months ago

    If im being honest I dont really understand what this poem is about but I can see you put a lot of thought into it

  • I remember when I got lost in the playground.I remember I had to live in my aunt’s house until we got our new house fixed.I remember when I went to D.R. for the first time.I remember my first house.I remember

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