Emma,
Your piece was very powerful, and very relatable in many regards. I especially loved your final paragraph where you made it clear that men were not inherently a burdened, but having a son would be a “privilege”. I think this is really important for a lot of people to understand because many believe women fear men and avoid them without ever…[Read more]

Luz,
Your piece was unbelievably electrifying and a true beauty to read. I truly have never read a student piece so powerful and personal as this. I can’t even begin to relate to the situation described in your piece because of what a privileged life I’ve led, and how I’ve grown up. This kind of writing strikes readers right in the heart, and the…[Read more]

This idea and ideas like it have always fascinated me, especially after the first time I read A Wrinkle in Time by Madeleine L’Engle. In that book, she discusses and narrates an entire story based upon the idea of the existence of a multiverse, and puts into an understandable perspective the idea of higher order dimensions. Your piece reminded me…[Read more]

Your passage was one of the most powerful I’ve read. The comment that struck me the most was yours saying, “They only mention some things like how the jews that ran away from the holocaust but don’t mention the discrimination faced when they migrated to the US.” Every one of your statements was poignant and related to a diverse group of people e…[Read more]

Luis, your story and further research had such an impact on me, and though I can’t directly relate or even begin to understand what you may be going through right now, I thought a response from a white American citizen might be interesting and possibly helpful. I absolutely agree with your statements, and sympathize with the difficulties of being…[Read more]

Your argument is very powerful, but I think it would be fruitful to emphasize a less biased point of view. In this way, you may be able to get your point across without offending anyone, and that way maybe those who would typically disagree with your argument might read further into the reasons you chose it. Using strong language and a hard bias…[Read more]

Ilda, your argument was very compelling! I think a great support would be acknowledging the opposing side of the pro-GMO argument, what they are saying, and why they are saying it. Many of those in that party believe that GMOs can be damaging to the health of those who consume them, and this is a very common misconception. I suggest the following…[Read more]

Nuong, I very much agree with the subject of your argument, and I hope to eventually read more about what you feel on the subject. I think it would be fruitful as well to go into some statistics and facts about life as it forms, consciousness, and the importance of the health of the mother. You may even touch on the dislike for Planned Parenthood…[Read more]