Hi- this is a really great piece. This subject can be difficult to write about and articulate but I think you did a wonderful job. Your sources made sense and flowed with your overarching claim. Your writing at the end about your experience was touching and good. Something that I would look back over is your second to the last sentence you bring up the THUG for a second but it seems a little out of place where it is right now. Overall very good work!

Dear Ammaar:

I am intrigued with your post and images of “Two americas,” because it was interesting to see the different perspectives of different people and how they see the U.S I agree with the statement that America is diversity and equal opportunity.

One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is: “ Being a young person in America today feels great because of all the opportunities that I am given.”I think this is awesome because in some places and countries, people don’t get as many opportunities as we do here in the U.S.

Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next, because I liked your comparisons of different ethnicities and how their perspective of the U.S is. I would like you to continue the great connections between different U.S citizens.
Leah Rodriguez

Hey,

I find your writing really in depth, considering multiple different source, and seeing these topics from multiple different perspectives, using The Hate U Give in the end as a final connection, along with your interpretations of the sources provided.
One thing you said that stands out for me is “ On the surface we may seem as if we have all these ideals but that isn’t true, not everyone is able to pursue the American Dream.” I found this really intuitive as reader, and agree with this idea of deception of the United States. Really good job, I really like your interpretations of these documents, and the way you use multiple different sources in each or your arguments.

This is a topic prior to reading this post I did not know much about. The only main point I knew about was the lack of job availability, but I had never thought of the toll that takes on one’s mentality or perception of themselves. That makes Native Americans more susceptible to mental illnesses such as depression which causes many of them to turn to substance abuse, as the post said. I was surprised by the fact that there are so many prevention programs and media coverage of this yet I was not even remotely aware of this until coming across this post. In addition, the statistics mentioned in the middle of the third paragraph shocked me, in terms of the likelihood of a Native American school-aged child having used a substance versus a non-Native. It is imperative that action is taken in these matters, especially because this issue, along with several others they face, stems from the lack of socioeconomic equality.