I am delighted about your annotated bibliography about “How gentrification is changing Oakland” because you talked a lot about gentrification and how is it affecting the community in Oakland. I also like the fact that you had multiple quotes that connect to each other. One sentence you wrote that stand out for me is “When he said “I wish” that really mattered because it shows that he would want to buy a house but because of all the higher prices he doesn’t have the chance to.” I think this is a situation were other people can relate to especially the ones who are living in apartment which can be very expensive too. Another sentence that stand out to me was “The community is dividing into groups, we are helping each other to make Oakland a better place, the Americans are with their people the African Americans are with their own people and the Latinos are with their people we are not united anymore like we used to be”. This is true because when people are dividing and going through different places the community breaks apart and no longer will be able to see eachother anymore. Thanks for your writing. I look forwards to seeing what you write next because you had a really good explanation. Also lots of quotes that follow up to each other.
I am showing interest on your blog because it really caught my attention how you you believe that gentrification causes people to move out and not be able to afford a place to live. A sentence you wrote that stood out to me was “ People might start to work more hours to make their paycheck a bit higher. Maybe 1 job at night and one in day. How will they spend time with their kids. The kids will be growing up without their dad or their mom or maybe without both. That will be making their kids suffer “. This sentence stood out to me because this is a really good point that your making. This actually happens now because there a lot of parents that need to work really hard to be able to take care of their personal needs. I also agree with you because when parents usually work a long amount of time their children tend to spend less and less time with their parents which doesn’t benefit the parents or the children. Thanks for your writing and sharing your opinion about gentrification.
Hey there I’m Jordan, a senior from Fremont High School and I really enjoyed your shadow box project because it had a lot of things that I enjoy myself such as the chicken wings and the money. I have just a couple of questions about your shadow box,
1.Who or what inspired your love for chicken wings?
2.Whis is there 3 pictures of chicken wings?
3.Was there something that you wanted to put in your shadow box that you simply did not have room for?
Thank you for sharing your work. My name is Matthew E and I am a student at Fremont High School.
Something I liked about your work was your theme about your favorite food.
Something I have a question about is Would you add more things other than food? Please feel free to comment on my work in the future. The address of my student blog is http://matthewefhs2021.edublogs.org/2017/11/03/assignment-5/.
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