Oakland has always been filled with violence in its neighborhoods and streets. According to Forbes in 2018, Oakland is ranked the third most violence city in the US (Forbes). This has been going on for a long. So
Dear Alex L,
I am moved by your post ¨Violence Vs Oakland¨ because I see the crime and violence in Oakland everyday and know how it can get. This is real problem because it affects many. One sentence you had that stood out to me was,¨The rate of violent crime in Oakland peaked in 1992, after which it began a sharp decline and reached a low in the year 2000, which was a 52% decrease over an eight-year period. After several years of relative stability, Oakland’s violent crime rate has generally been increasing again since 2005¨. This surprised me because it is interesting to see how the crime rate went down and them how it went back up. I wonder what could have caused it. Another sentence you wrote that stood out to me was, ¨more than 30,000 residents living below the poverty line¨ this stood out because i see this in the city a lot and i see how this affects others. I look forward to seeing what you write next, because you make good points and you have an amazing writing style.
Dear Alex L,
Your idea of hiring more policeman on duty is questioning because how will it really make a difference? I understand it is to provide more jobs for the people but not many people are qualified for this position. Because who would be hiring these officers and ensuring we hire “good officers” other than “bad officers”. It is just an idea for you to think about to come up with alternatives, maybe proving programs that give people what they need such as food, clothing, and job opportunities so they wont turn to stealing, violent actions or sell drugs for money. Because imputing police officers into the streets of Oakland you wont know if they are officers that will kill another person in cold blood or actually help the community. I am pleased that you wrote a topic on a current important issue.
Your work makes me happy. I’m really happy that someone decided to do a blog post on the violence in Oakland. I feel like the violence in Oakland should definitely be highlighted, because the violence is so important and can be many different types of violence. Your work actually reminded me of my own work because I did my blog on Police Brutality in Oakland (you should check it out). A quote that stood out to me was, “Those issue can also lead to violence for example, when someone lose their job and they need money so then they rob so they can get money and then it will cause violence and harm other people.”, this quote stood out to me because I feel that this is true. Sometimes in Oakland and even other places, people cause violence because they need something Oakland obviously couldn’t provide so they act out. Another quote that stood out to me was, “Oakland now is “better” then it was before but I think there is less violence.” This quote stood out to me because I agree and don’t agree with you about this. The part that I don’t agree with is that you think Oakland has gotten better then it was before. I feel like Oakland has a series of problems and like the gentrification and ICE one we’re having now are as bad as the police brutality issue a couple of years ago. Oakland isn’t better because us as people haven’t united yet, which sucks. But I do agree that there is less violence now, there used to be times of the drug war and when police would highly abuse their power. Thank you for writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next, because your work is agreeable on some accounts. I really appreciate getting a chance to read your work. If you’d like please reply.
I’m sorry to hear that your home has so much violence going on, and the fact that it can be related to Romeo and Juliet. I am, however, impressed that you have taken this and learned from it. I think that it shows how strong this environment has made you. I can’t say that I know what your going through, because I live somewhere where violence isn’t common, so the best I can do is read about it. I am glad that the groups have gone away from the violence because that shows that they have at least started to find a solution against the violence. But I think that there are many thing that our generation can do to end this violence, and maybe live in a world of peace (or at least I hope we can). Right now the biggest trend for ending violence is that against women. This trend shows that the more it is talked about the stronger the effect it has. Here is an article about how fighting this violence has brought people together to fight: https://reliefweb.int/report/world/life-without-threat-violence-everyone-leave-no-one-behind. Thank you and I hope to read more from you in the future.
I am interested in your shadow box because you are showing what you like or admire in your life. You show your love in the sport soccer and that Cristiano Ronaldo is your favorite soccer player. You have a headband to keep your hair back so when you are in a soccer match, your hair don’t get in your way. I think this shadow box is…[Read more]
I really enjoyed reading your piece. I found your use of descriptors enhanced my understanding of your shadow box very well. It made it very easy to understand you as a person and a little bit of your background too where you talk about how your “race is Latino, my ethnicity is Mexican, and my nationality is American.” I found it a little distracting when you talked about Puerto Vallarta but the overall syntax of the piece was wonderful. Thanks for sharing your piece.
I found your background to be very interesting and shadow box to be very interesting. I thought your creation of the soccer field was very creative and looked really good. I also enjoyed reading about the different things from Mexico that you put in your box.
I really enjoy the way you explained why everything you included in your shadow box is importnt to you. I am a senior at Fremont High School and I am looking forward to seeing your next posts and seeing you play for Life academy this soccer season.
Here are a few questions to help you think furtherly. Why is soccer so important to you? What is your favorite soccer team and why? How does soccer shape the way you are? I really enjoyed the phrase , “The two necklaces that are in my box are from a very beautiful place in Mexico called, Puerto Vallarta. It’s very cool and good looking there because the beach is so beautiful and the sand is so hot and the water is warm” , because it helps me imagine Puerto Vallarta which shows your writting is engaging.
Alejandro, I really liked your shadow box and how well you incorporated soccer and objects that are a representation of your heritage. I further ask you, do you play on a competitive team? Also, do you think you play soccer on a higher team in high school? Also, what about do you like especially? Playing soccer also have many good benefits such as “Soccer is a good sport for maintaining health, fitness, strength and endurance.
You can play with a club, learn through a junior clinic or have a kick with friends. Make sure you have plenty of fluids on hand and rehydrate regularly. Don’t overdo it. Mix up your physical activity with other low-impact sports.” https://www.betterhealth.vic.gov.au/health/healthyliving/soccer-health-benefits
I like how in your shadow box you have about soccer and that you are mexican. Then the shinguard in the box is how much I play soccer and how much I love to play soccer. Is good to have that because you can protect yourself from getting hurt or injured. And I connect to this because I also like to play soccer and am mexican and go for Real Madrid.
Thank you for sharing your work. My name is Tania and I am a student at Fremont High School.
Something I liked about your work was that you represented where you are from.
Something I have a question about is what part of mexico you’re from. Please feel free to comment on my work in the future. The address of my student blog is http://taniarfhs2021.edubolgs.org/ .
I love how you made a soccer field in your shadow box. That shows how you are so creative seeing this soccer field on your shadow box inspired me to make a soccer field in my shadow box, So thanks for sharing this shadow box with us. Keep on doing what you are doing. It’s coming home.
I like how you added very specific things to describe the different identities. I like how on of your chosen identity is being a soccer player because I like playing soccer as well we have something in common.
I am inspired by your work of art your shadow box because you explain a lot about yourself and what you do. One thing that you said about yourself is that you like to play soccer a lot. Another thing I also heard you say was how you are mexican and say why you are happy to be that.
I like how you explained each of your objects, I also liked it a lot because I think you put objects with which you identify, I think you did a good job with your shadow box because in truth you look that you identify where you are and who you are.
Dear Olivia, I am proud of your work and on how you did it while spending your time doing this good argument. The sentence that stands out to me is “are happy when they are doing things they love or are with people they love.” I do agree with you about how you explained that how people can be happy with the things they love or love doing and love…[Read more]
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