Thanks for writing this, Alexandra. You are a good writer. I love your words “from nothing but pure love,” and I’m glad you can see loveliness in the world around you, even though there are also so many things that are negative and challenging. Keep writing!
I find your poem very interesting. In hard times like those you described, I would find it very hard to stay positive. However, you still take pride in your home city of Oakland, despite the pain you and those around you go through.
In my class,we saw Chimamanda Adiche’s “The Danger of a Single Story”. It showed how one story about a certain place can lead one to expect only that thing out of people from there. However, you see good in Oakland, even though it’s always seen in a bleak, hopeless light.
Thank you for your poem. I look forward to hearing more of your stories of your life and what else Oakland has to offer beyond the evil.
I am in love with your poem because I can relate to many aspects of the writing and its relatable for the audience, for many different types of people.Like people who struggle to find themselves or have family problems and struggles at home or mental health issues with sadness and a sense of being lost in society and the world.
One thing you said that stood out to me was: “I am from a family who struggles yet still finds time to smile A pile of unpaid bills, they tell me not to worry”. I think this is sad, especially coming from me because I’ve experienced this when I was around 7-9 years old, I didn’t want to grow up because I was scared this would be what life was gonna be like forever. Also the line, “I tell myself, for the future I am prepared but the thought of commitment gets me scared” was relatable because many teens and young adults today have trouble growing up and being on their own and finding themselves.
In my class, we watched Chimamanda Adiche’s “The Danger of a Single Story.” Your post reminded me of this quote from her speech: “All of these stories make me who I am. But to insist on only these negative stories is to flatten my experience and to overlook the many other stories that formed me”. I thought that this quote meant that experiences in life change you and help form you as the person you’ll grow to be, I thought this connected to your poem because we’re scared of commitment of the future and growing up because we’re not ready. But not being ready is part of growing up,if we were ready to grow up, we wouldn’t be growing.
Thanks for your project. I look forward to seeing what you write next because I believe your poem speaks for a lot of people like me and you, through your writing you can make a difference to make the world a better place.
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We merged several earlier blogging projects. We have found that there are many advantages to bringing students together in one site that lives beyond any particular class. It’s easier for individual students to read and write about their own passions, to connect with other students, comment on each other’s work, and create multimedia posts for each other. Further, it’s been exciting for us to pool our knowledge about curriculum, connected learning, and digital literacies.
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