a harsh chaotic melody

echoes through the storm drenched clouds

and orchestral raindrops

and i sit and smile and listen

to the music of the geese

whose snowy wings float high above

and the aria goes on

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February 16, 2018 3:43 pm

Abby, your poem was beautiful. I could picture a perfect snapshot of the moment you were trying to capture because of your strong diction and unique voice. I can’t wait to read more of your work.

February 16, 2018 6:53 am

Hi Abigail. Great word choice! I would love to see a summary of a deciphered version of your statement, very intreated in what this is about

February 16, 2018 1:52 am

Abby, I really love the imagery you used in this piece and the descriptive wording that created such a precise picture in my mind. Your choice of words is powerful and really adds to the voice of your poem, bringing out strong emotions in the reader.

February 15, 2018 11:56 pm

Abigail, you did an amazing job on this poem. You are truly a poet! I love the reoccurring theme of music and orchestra, I truly appreciated that in your poem. I’m looking forward to seeing your next poems.

February 15, 2018 7:49 pm

Abigail, this poem is amazing. It shows great imagery and describes everything out in the world. I like this poem a lot and it creates a lot of images that I see where I live. Hope to see more poems in the future.

February 15, 2018 7:15 pm

Abigail, this is so beautiful! It is a great example of a short and sweet poem describing the beauty of nature. I really like “orchestral raindrops”, it creates a great visual of rain falling into a perfect melody. You are really good with imagery and I look forwards to seeing your next poems.

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