This is my body. In it are hidden emotions.
Emotions from a dark place with a burnt dust smell. That’s a Scary thing right?
This is a scary body and I’m a miracle, living in it.
This is my body. In it are hidden emotions.
My body deserves to be broken from this dark place of despair.
My body is wrapped around a place called the past.
I carry the emotions of my past
And I pray to God I let go of the emotions of my scary past.
From the crying nights
To the long overthinking nights.
My body is a hallway with an almost never-ending dark place.
I’m brave enough to say I’m in a dark place
But also brave enough to say I will be victorious in this race.
Dear Raniyah,
I am delighted by your poem, Hidden Emotions since you opened up about the way you feel inside your body. Many people go through the same thing, and seeing others open up about it helps them understand that they are not alone and that they are able to fight through it.
Two sentences that you wrote that stood out to me were “My body deserves to be broken from this dark place of despair” and “My body is wrapped around a place called the past”. I thought these were significant because, in the first quote, you realize that the things you’ve been through could lead for someone to give up and ‘your body to be broken’ but you were strong and have been fighting through it. By sharing this you are able to inspire others experiencing similar situations. The reason your second quote stood out to me was because I related to it. There are times where I am mentally not present in the moment because I am stuck in the past. Overthinking about what you did or didn’t do can take a lot of time from someone, which I think many people who do it have acknowledged.
Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next and being able to find relatable content. I hope that you are able to find further purpose within your writing and explore different ways to reach your highest potential.
-Andrea L
“My mind is a hallway with an almost never-ending dark place.” This was very deep and really brought a lot of imagery to your article. I loved this. Good job.
Raniyah,
This is a great poem! This is something that every teenager can relate to in one way or another. The ability to have courage when things get tough and perservere is an important skill we all must have to get through the stresses of our lives. Thanks a lot for sharing!
Thank you so much for looking at it! Also, I agree.
Raniyah, your poem is incredibly inspiring and moving. I find myself relating to a lot of your poem and I commend you for being strong enough to write about your emotions and what you are going through. The statement “I am brave enough to say I am in a dark place but also brave enough to say I will be victorious in this race” stood out to me and inspired me to keep going. I hope this poem reaches more people, it inspired me and I know it will inspire others as well.
Thank you so much!
This poem inspires me to improve my own mental health. Your courage in writing gives me courage to better myself. Many people struggle with their bodies and emotions. The goal in life is to surpass these struggles to a finish line of happiness.
Wow, thank you so much! I appreciate the time you took to write your thoughts on my poem!
Dear Raniyah:
I am inspired by your poem, “Hidden Emotions” because of your courage. You are not afraid to admit that you are not in the best place at the moment, but you know this and you have faith that your situation will improve in the future.
One sentence you wrote that stands out to me is: “To the long overthinking nights.” I think this is relatable because I too overthink. I overthink with even the simplest answer or choice. Over the years I learned that overthinking can cause more harm than good. I go with my gut, but I also use logic. If it’s a decision that will not affect me in the next 5 years, I will not beat myself up about it because it will not be worth it.
Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next because you are an inspiring person and also a very strong person. You can do this, I believe in you!
Chris Aguila-OCHS
Thank you!
I absolutely love the line “This is a scary body and I’m a miracle, living in it.” It’s a strong emotional, hopeful, turn. Keep up the good work!
Thank you so much!!!